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Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? Explain to what extent you agree or disagree. v.1

Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? Explain v. 1
Celebrities often give their thoughts on general topics. Sometimes it is not suitable for the public. This essay agrees with the statement because many people admire them, and their opinions can have equal implications on both sides. On the one hand, celebrities are popular and famous. They are role models for many people who admire them for who they are, and they have a mass appeal, which can help their messages reach out to audiences easily. Also, many youngsters blindly try to replicate their role models on what they say and follow. For instance, a famous Bollywood Star started a cleanliness campaign in Mumbai, India, requesting people to start cleaning their neighbourhoods. Around 100, 000 people, mostly teenagers, participated in this campaign, which was tremendous support for any campaign organized. In a country like India, where most of the population is youth, the opinions of superstars can have a huge impact On the other hand, famous personalities should act responsibly when discussing public issues. That is to say that people under limelight should give their opinions keeping public interests in mind. Wrong statements can lead to the instigation of violence and indifferences in society. For example, if an actor supports a particular religion on any social issue, this can create social differences with another segment of people and can lead to violence in the worst-case-scenario. Therefore, famous people should be sensible when talking on public platforms about critical subjects. In conclusion, although celebrities have a good reach out to the public, I believe they should restrain from speaking out on public issues without much knowledge about the topics.
Celebrities
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give their thoughts on general topics.
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it is not suitable for the
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public
. This essay
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agrees
with the statement
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because
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many
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people
admire them, and their opinions can have equal implications on both sides.

On the one hand, celebrities are popular and
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famous
. They are role models for
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many
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people
who admire them for who they are, and they have a mass appeal, which can
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help
their messages reach out to audiences
easily
.
Also
,
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many
youngsters
blindly
try to replicate their role models on what they say and follow.
For instance
, a
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famous
Bollywood Star
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started
a cleanliness campaign in Mumbai, India, requesting
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people
to
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start
cleaning their
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neighbourhoods
. Around 100, 000
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people
,
mostly
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teenagers
, participated in this campaign, which was tremendous support for any campaign organized. In a country like India, where most of the population is youth, the opinions of superstars can have a huge impact

On the other hand
,
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famous
personalities should act
responsibly
when discussing
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public
issues.
That is
to say that
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people
under limelight should give their opinions keeping
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public
interests in mind.
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Wrong
statements can lead to the instigation of violence and
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indifferences
in society.
For example
, if an actor supports a particular religion on any social issue, this can create social differences with another segment of
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people
and can lead to violence in the worst-case-scenario.
Therefore
,
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famous
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people
should be sensible when talking on
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public
platforms about critical subjects.

In conclusion
, although celebrities have a
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good
reach out to the
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public
, I believe they should restrain from speaking out on
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public
issues without much knowledge about the topics.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
17Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS essay Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? Explain v. 1

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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