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Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? To what extend do you agree or disagree v.3

Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? v. 3
As of today, famous people receive lots of attention from the audience. They sometimes also deliver their opinions about public topics. Regarding the question, whether this is a good thing or not, I completely agree that they can always give out their piece of mind to the public, under certain conditions. This essay will discuss the argument, also providing support as to why I would agree to the statement. Firstly, celebrities have large impacts on different areas of people, therefore, need to be cautious of their actions. For example, giving a very biased and negative response to a social issue could have adverse effects for both the celebrity and the public. The so called 'fans' of the person could emphasize the idea he/she has given, further creating a quarrel. Hence, I believe that fame should be dealt with lots of limits and precautions. On the other hand, opining on a major problem to raise awareness could have many advantages. As they are popular, information could be easily spread and can reach many people easily. For instance, with the advancement of social media, influencing people and public figures are demonstrating how humans are affecting the lives of marine animals, as well as, how different animal species are being unfairly treated. These kinds of implications spread good messages and can easily be shared. To conclude, although these people should have a barrier that limits them to certain measures, every living person can express their own opinion. Thus, I agree with the statement that, famous people can give their point of views, and that it could have many benefits.
As of
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today
,
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famous
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people
receive lots of attention from the audience. They
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sometimes
also
deliver their opinions about
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public
topics. Regarding the question, whether this is a
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good
thing or not, I completely
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agree
that they can always give out their piece of mind to the
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public
, under certain conditions. This essay will discuss the argument,
also
providing support as to why I would
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agree
to the statement.

Firstly
, celebrities have large impacts on
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different
areas of
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people
,
therefore
, need to be cautious of their actions.
For example
, giving a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
biased and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
response to a social issue could have adverse effects for both the celebrity and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
public
. The
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
called 'fans' of the person could emphasize the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
he/she has
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given
,
further
creating a quarrel.
Hence
, I believe that fame should
be dealt
with lots of limits and precautions.

On the other hand
, opining on a major problem to raise awareness could have
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many
advantages. As they are popular, information could be
easily
spread and can reach
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many
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people
easily
.
For instance
, with the advancement of social media, influencing
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people
and
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public
figures are demonstrating how humans are affecting the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
lives
of marine animals,
as well
as, how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
animal species are being
unfairly
treated. These kinds of implications spread
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
messages and can
easily
be shared
.

To conclude
, although these
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people
should have a barrier that limits them to certain measures, every living person can express their
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
opinion.
Thus
, I
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agree
with the statement that,
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famous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
can give their point of views, and that it could have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
benefits.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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