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Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? v. 2
Now a day, it is very common to see that the famous personalities expressing their views on the topics which are related to general people. In my opinion, I think it is a good thing to do and to certain extend I agree with it, however, there is a point which is worth looking for my disagreement. To begin with, there are two points which will clarify that why I agree with the given statement. Firstly, the famous personalities are known to everyone and the general public look at them as their role models, so if they are talking about something it will catch the people's attention and they will try to follow it. For instance, the latest movement that has started in India about "Healthy living" which is launched by the Government and the brand ambassador of it is one of the famous actor of Indian cinema, so his views are highly heard by the masses and because of which it has become a successful movement. Furthermore, if Someone with the name and the fame is talking about some public issues, it will not only get the national but also the international media attention and the common man's voice will be heard. On the other hand, the only reason for my disagreement is what if the famous person advocating for the people is not mature enough and gives his or her view which is in the favour of a certain group of people, it will affect the country as a whole. To conclude, I think it is good that the famous people are becoming more vocal and they are the voice of the general public, but we as an individual need to use our sense rather than blindly following them.
Now
a day, it is
very
common to
see
that the
famous
personalities expressing their views on the topics which
are related
to general
people
. In my opinion, I
think
it is a
good
thing to do and to certain
extend
I
agree
with it,
however
, there is a point which is worth looking for my disagreement.

To
begin
with, there are two points which will clarify that why I
agree
with the
given
statement.
Firstly
, the
famous
personalities
are known
to everyone and the
general public
look at them as their role models,
so
if they are talking about something it will catch the
people
's
attention and
they will try to follow it.
For instance
, the latest movement that has
started
in India about
"
Healthy living
"
which
is launched
by the
Government
and the brand ambassador of it is one of the
famous
actor of Indian cinema,
so
his views are
highly
heard by the masses and
because
of which it has become a successful movement.
Furthermore
, if

Someone with the name and the fame is talking about
some
public issues, it will not
only
get
the national
but
also
the international media attention and the common
man
's voice will
be heard
.

On the other hand
, the
only
reason for my disagreement is what if the
famous
person advocating for the
people
is
not mature
enough
and gives
his or her
view which is in the
favour
of a certain group of
people
, it will affect the country as a whole.

To conclude
, I
think
it is
good
that the
famous
people
are becoming more
vocal and
they are the voice of the
general public
,
but
we as an individual need to
use
our sense
rather
than
blindly
following them.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Famous people sometimes give their opinions on public topics. Is this a good thing? v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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