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Describe your family Do you have a large or small family How much time do you spend with your family What do you like to do together as a family Do you get along well with your family Are people in your country generally close to their families v.1

Describe your family Do you have a large or small family How much time do you spend with your family What do you like to do together as a family Do you get along well with your family Are people in your country generally close to their families v. 1
Throwaway culture has become very common with the certain demographics of society. This is especially easily observable with middle and higher income segment in the developed countries. Discarding old things has certain disadvantages, such as increasing land and sea pollution and burden on limited earthly resources, outweigh any possible economic advantages. When people opt to acquire new things and dispose old ones, it worsens the problem all around us. People are choosing to toss old things, before the end of their life, at an increasing rate because, first, they can afford to and, second, fashion changes 52 times a year. It has estimated that 28% of land in developing nations is going to be used as a landfill, according to a report by the United Nations. Even more, these pollutants, such as plastic, haven't been limited to, land only, and it has spread to our oceans. The amount of plastics found in our seafood is alarming. Therefore, changing people's mindset to increase the life span of items is necessary. In addition, manufacturing new items come at a huge cost to earth's very limited resources. To meet the demand for new things, raw materials need to be mined at an even increasing speed. Mining not only depletes the limited reserve of raw metals, but also releases toxic materials into the rivers during the extraction and purification process, rendering them polluted beyond imagination. For example, we will run out of lithium, that is the backbone of all modern hardware technologies, in the near future, leaving nothing behind for future generation. This show, it is crucial for us to take concrete steps. In my opinion, throwing away things will not only adds to ever increasing pollution, but also unnecessarily reduce the valuable resources that future generations will have to rely on for their advancement. In conclusion, any economic benefits that we may gain will be washed away by huge environmental deficit.
Throwaway culture has become
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very
common with the certain demographics of society. This is
especially
easily
observable with middle and higher income segment in the
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developed countries
. Discarding
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old
things has certain disadvantages, such as
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increasing
land and sea pollution and burden on
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limited
earthly
resources, outweigh any possible economic advantages.

When
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people
opt to acquire new things and dispose
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old
ones, it worsens the problem all around us.
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People
are choosing to toss
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old
things,
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before
the
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end
of their life, at an
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increasing
rate
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because
,
first
, they can afford to and, second, fashion
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changes
52 times a year. It has estimated that 28% of land in developing nations is going to be
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used
as a landfill, according to a report by the United Nations. Even more, these pollutants, such as plastic, haven't been
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limited
to, land
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only
, and it has spread to our oceans. The amount of plastics found in our seafood is alarming.
Therefore
, changing
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people
's mindset to increase the life span of items is necessary.

In addition
, manufacturing new items
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come
at a huge cost to earth's
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very
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limited
resources. To
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meet
the demand for new things, raw materials need to
be mined
at an even
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increasing
speed. Mining not
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only
depletes the
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limited
reserve of raw metals,
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but
also
releases toxic materials into the rivers during the extraction and purification process, rendering them polluted beyond imagination.
For example
, we will run out of lithium,
that is
the backbone of all modern hardware technologies, in the near future, leaving nothing behind for future generation. This
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show
, it is crucial for us to take concrete steps.

In my opinion, throwing away things will not
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only
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adds
to ever
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increasing
pollution,
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but
also
unnecessarily
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reduce
the valuable resources that future generations will
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have to
rely on for their advancement.
In conclusion
, any economic benefits that we may gain will
be washed
away by huge environmental deficit.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Describe your family Do you have a large or small family How much time do you spend with your family What do you like to do together as a family Do you get along well with your family Are people in your country generally close to their families v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
318 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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