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Describe your family? Do you have a large or small family? How much time do you spend with your family? What do you like to do together as a family? Do you get along well with your family? Are people in your country generally close to their family? v.2

Describe your family? Do you have a large or small family? How much time do you spend with your family? What do you like to do together as a family? Do you get along well with your family? Are people in your country generally close to their family? v. 2
The unemployment is extremely enormous problem of bulk of the countries which is under development. In the modern life, the level of out of work has been increasing compare to for recent decades. The most recent results strongly demonstrate that it has several specific reasons Firstly, it has been experienced that the enormous rise in a number of citizens rather than last years. Because of it, to take China, for example exceeding 45% the humans are illiterate. Not only this process poses jobless but also impact on people’s health within countries. A multitude of people thinks that the principal reason is due to education and qualifications. Therefore, if jobless individuals had a diploma of university they would have private affair. According to world health statistics jobless has lent to stress as well as having deleterious effect on people. It is undeniable fact that jobless partly draws on rising populations, therefor more and more people think that this situation must be controlled by states. Not only unemployment humans need both career advice and retraining but also they think that governments back them up such as providing vocational courses. In addition, In many parts of the world bulk of states either create the claim benefits system or pay jobless benefits so as to help them. According to international crime statistic, if it were not to some extent much out of work it neither would have many crimes or murders. To conclude, despite the fact that jobless pose a detrimental effect on the individual, this problem has been controlled by states. In addition, from my perspective all of people must work to earn money for a living and support themselves as well.
The unemployment is
extremely
enormous problem of bulk of the countries which is under development. In the modern life, the level of out of work has been increasing compare to for recent decades. The most recent results
strongly
demonstrate that it has several specific reasons

Firstly
, it has
been experienced
that the enormous rise in a number of citizens
rather
than last years.
Because
of it, to take China,
for example
exceeding 45% the humans are illiterate. Not
only
this process poses jobless
but
also
impact on
people’s
health within countries. A multitude of
people
thinks
that the principal reason is due to education and qualifications.
Therefore
, if jobless individuals had a diploma of university they would have private affair. According to world health statistics jobless has lent to
stress
as well
as having deleterious effect on
people
.

It is undeniable fact that jobless partly draws on rising populations, therefor more and more
people
think
that this situation
must
be controlled
by states. Not
only
unemployment humans need both career advice and retraining
but
also
they
think
that
governments
back them up such as providing vocational courses.
In addition
, In
many
parts of the world bulk of states either create the claim benefits system or pay jobless benefits
so as to
help
them. According to international crime statistic, if it were not to
some
extent much out of work it neither would have
many
crimes or murders.

To conclude
, despite the fact that jobless pose a detrimental effect on the individual, this problem has
been controlled
by states.
In addition
, from my perspective all of
people
must
work to earn money for a living and support themselves
as well
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Describe your family? Do you have a large or small family? How much time do you spend with your family? What do you like to do together as a family? Do you get along well with your family? Are people in your country generally close to their family? v. 2

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
279 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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