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Families who do not send their children to public schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree v.1

Families who do not send their children to public schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. v. 1
It has been argued that people who sponsor their children in private schools, should be exempted from taxation meant to support public schools and universal basic education. I my opinion, I strongly disagree with this view. Families whose children do not attend public school must continue to pay tax. This is necessary to support government in catering for the less privileged and poorer families as we live in and operate a socialist economy. While this ensures fairness and equity, it also makes the society safe and secure for all. For example, if the poor was denied education because the rich did not support public school through tax because he was not subscribing to them, the sons of the poor who could not afford education could turn to hooligans and terrorise the communities. Furthermore, taxes should be paid by all citizens to support public school because it is more cost effective. In fact, it is clear that if the public schools are functioning optimally, everybody will want to attend them including the rich because it is cheaper with more qualified teachers and other manpower. Conversely private schools are unnecessarily costly, employing cheap unqualified labour and extorting the communities. Public school needs just little more support from sources, such as taxes to give its best for everyone. For instance, public schools are fully funded through taxation in Ghana, and they have high standard such that private schools do not thrive there at all. To conclude, no tax exemption or concession on those whose children are not in public school in order to ensure basic education for all, standardize our government school and make a secure society.
It has
been argued
that
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people
who sponsor their children in private
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schools
, should
be exempted
from taxation meant to
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support
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public
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schools
and universal basic
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education
. I my opinion, I
strongly
disagree with this view.

Families whose children do not attend
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public
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school
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must
continue to pay
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tax
. This is necessary to
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support
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government
in catering for the less privileged and poorer families as we
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live
in and operate a socialist economy. While this ensures fairness and equity, it
also
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makes
the society safe and secure for all.
For example
, if the poor
was denied
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education
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because
the rich did not
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support
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public
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school
through
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tax
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because
he was not subscribing to them, the sons of the poor who could not afford
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education
could turn to hooligans and
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terrorise
the communities.

Furthermore
,
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taxes
should
be paid
by all citizens to
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support
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public
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school
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because
it is more cost effective. In fact, it is
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clear
that if the
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public
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schools
are functioning
optimally
, everybody will want to attend them including the rich
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because
it is cheaper with more qualified teachers and other manpower.
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Conversely
private
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schools
are
unnecessarily
costly, employing
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cheap
unqualified
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labour
and extorting the communities.
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Public
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school
needs
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just
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little
more
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support
from sources, such as
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taxes
to give its best for everyone.
For instance
,
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public
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schools
are
fully
funded through taxation in Ghana, and they have high standard such that private
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schools
do not thrive there at all.

To conclude
, no
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tax
exemption or concession on those whose children are not in
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public
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school
in order to ensure basic
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education
for all, standardize our
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government
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school
and
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make
a secure society.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
34Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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IELTS essay Families who do not send their children to public schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
274 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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