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Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. v. 1
Assigning a home-based task to the children is a part of schooling. While some argue that children must not be assign a daily homework, others opine that, to accomplished success at learning institutes, home task should be given to them. This essay will discuss why daily base home task is not beneficial but why it is ultimately having paramount importance. To begin with, juvenile should not be entrusted with daily homework as it increasingly developed burden on them. If school would assign a mandatory home task to the offspring, it would fostered immense workload pressure on their brains, as adolescents are already spending full day at schools going through tests, attending long hour classes, quizzes, and other assessments. A psychological study, for instance, has revealed that children who opt for study materials are enormously vulnerable to the mental stress. Thus, it is clear that home-based assignments result in high workload and mental burden. However, the opponents of the former view say it is better to assign everyday homework task to the offspring’s. The reason they present is owing to the time most of the youngsters spent in unproductive activities at homes which can be better utilized in completing a study work. For example, A recent survey has suggested that a child priority activity at homes is to opt for leisure; hence, resulting in achieving nothing useful. Therefore, restricting juveniles to home assignment is propitious for them. In conclusion, should schools assign home study or work to the students? Some think there should be no home assignment; whereas, others are in favor of work entrusted to juveniles at homes. In my opinion, it is having paramount importance to assign home task to students.
Assigning a home-based
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to the children is a part of schooling. While
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argue that children
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assign
a daily homework, others opine that, to accomplished success at learning institutes, home
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task
should be
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given
to them. This essay will discuss why daily base home
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task
is not beneficial
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but
why it is
ultimately
having paramount importance.

To
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begin
with, juvenile should not
be entrusted
with daily homework as it
increasingly
developed burden on them. If school would
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assign
a mandatory home
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task
to the offspring, it would
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fostered
immense workload pressure on their brains, as adolescents are already spending full day at schools going through
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tests
, attending long hour classes, quizzes, and other assessments. A psychological
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study
,
for instance
, has revealed that children who opt for
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study
materials are
enormously
vulnerable to the mental
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stress
.
Thus
, it is
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clear
that home-based assignments result in high workload and mental burden.

However
, the opponents of the former view say it is better to
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assign
everyday homework
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task
to the offspring’s. The reason they present is owing to the time most of the youngsters spent in unproductive activities at
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homes
which can be better utilized in completing a
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study
work.
For example
, A recent survey has suggested that a child priority activity at
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homes
is to opt for leisure;
hence
, resulting in achieving nothing useful.
Therefore
, restricting juveniles to home assignment is propitious for them.

In conclusion
, should
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schools
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assign
home
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study
or work to the students?
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Some
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think
there should be no home assignment; whereas, others are in favor of work entrusted to juveniles at
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homes
. In my opinion, it is having paramount importance to
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assign
home
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task
to students.
9Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
18Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that children should not be given homework every day, while others believe that they must get homework every day in order to be successful at school. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
282 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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