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F: Hey, Jeff. How's it going? M: Not too good. You know how I work as a lab assistant in one of the science labs? F: Yeah. M: Well, I was in there this afternoon, and I had some textbooks with me, and I accidentally left one of my psychology books i v.1

F: Hey, Jeff. How's it going? M: Not too good. You know how I work as a lab assistant in one of the science labs? F: Yeah. M: Well, I was in there this afternoon, and I had some textbooks with me, and I accidentally left one of my psychology books i v. 1
A considerable number of people assert that an ever increasing use of technology, such as tablets and laptops, in the classroom is a positive development. Others, on the other hand, are adamant opponents of the aforementioned view, claiming that think it will lead to adverse ramifications. The both views of the brought forth prompt must be pondered upon prior to advocating one. It is clear that the internet has provided students with access to more information than ever before. Moreover, learners have the ability to research and learn about any subject at the touch of a button. It is therefore agreed that technology is a very worthwhile tool for education. Wikipedia is a prime example, where students can simply type in any keyword and gain access to in-depth knowledge quickly and easily. However, many disagree and feel that technology deprives people of real human interaction. Human interaction teaches people valuable skills such as discourse, debate and empathy. Despite this, human interaction is still possible through the internet and it would be wrong to dismiss it for this reason. For instance, Skype and Facebook make it possible for people to interact in ways that were never before possible. In conclusion, while the benefits of technology, particularly the internet, allow students to tap in to limitless sources of information, some still feel that people should be wary of this new phenomenon and not allow it to curb face to face interaction. However, as long as we are careful to keep in mind the importance of human interaction in education, the educational benefits are clearly positive.
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assert that an
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of
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, such as tablets and laptops, in the classroom is a
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development. Others,
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technology
is a
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worthwhile tool for education. Wikipedia is a prime example, where students can
simply
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quickly
and
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.

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,
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disagree and feel that
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deprives
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of real
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human
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interaction
.
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teaches
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valuable
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skills
such as discourse, debate and empathy. Despite this,
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to dismiss it
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, Skype and Facebook
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to interact in ways that were never
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possible.

In conclusion
, while the benefits of
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,
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the internet,
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allow
students to tap in to limitless sources of information,
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some
still
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should be wary of this new phenomenon and not
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allow
it to curb face to face
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interaction
.
However
, as long as we are careful to
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keep
in mind the importance of
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human
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interaction
in education, the educational benefits are
clearly
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positive
.
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IELTS essay F: Hey, Jeff. How's it going? M: Not too good. You know how I work as a lab assistant in one of the science labs? F: Yeah. M: Well, I was in there this afternoon, and I had some textbooks with me, and I accidentally left one of my psychology books i v. 1

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4 paragraphs
263 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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