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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can do governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.6

Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can do governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do? v. 6
The world environment damage has become a major concern over the last couple of decades, resulting debates and news that appeared on several media about the issues. It is observed that the damage is a result of human's lifestyle, from the smallest thing as litter, use private transportation, smoking, to such industrial process as factory and cutting forests that prioritizing money than life. The basic human bad habit should be changed as soon as possible. Litter makes the chain of life is disrupted. The existing trash is thrown into the sea and eaten by fish. The difficult trash to decompose like plastic is very dangerous for the life under the sea. Many researchers and scientists predict that in 2030, the sea will contain 80% of plastic if we can't reduce the usage of rubbish that is not easily biodegradable. Some business sectors need to change and being aware of the environmental damage. Their selfishness could bring a danger for other's life. For example, the burning forest case in Australia last year killed thousands koala and others fauna species. Many animals were dying, and the rest were survived with pain. This case was actually succeeded in opening world's eyes, as people did donation and conservation from them. But how if it will happen again in bigger cases in the future? However, many government rules are already written precisely about the environmental care and protection. Still, human and business sectors can't easily get rid of their bad habit though. The conclusion is, it is really important for the government to strengthen their rules not only by encouraging some positive behaviour, but also provide strict penalties and deterrent effects for whoever violates the law.
The world environment damage has become a major concern over the last couple of decades, resulting debates and news that appeared on several media about the issues. It
is observed
that the damage is a result of human's lifestyle, from the smallest thing as litter,
use
private transportation, smoking, to such industrial process as factory and cutting forests that prioritizing money than life.

The basic human
bad
habit should be
changed
as
soon
as possible. Litter
makes
the chain of life
is disrupted
. The existing trash
is thrown
into the sea and eaten by fish. The difficult trash to decompose like plastic is
very
dangerous
for the life under the sea.
Many
researchers and scientists predict that in 2030, the sea will contain 80% of plastic if we can't
reduce
the usage of rubbish
that is
not
easily
biodegradable.

Some
business sectors need to
change
and being aware of the environmental damage. Their selfishness could bring a
danger
for other's life.
For example
, the burning forest case in Australia last year killed thousands koala
and others
fauna species.
Many
animals were dying, and the rest
were survived
with pain. This case was actually succeeded in opening world's eyes, as
people
did donation and conservation from them.
But
how if it will happen again in bigger cases in the future?

However
,
many
government
rules
are already written
precisely
about the environmental care and protection.
Still
, human and business sectors can't
easily
get
rid of their
bad
habit though. The conclusion is, it is
really
important
for the
government
to strengthen their
rules
not
only
by encouraging
some
positive
behaviour
,
but
also
provide strict penalties and deterrent effects for whoever violates the law.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can do governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do? v. 6

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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