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Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions? v.1

Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions? v. 1
In today's globalised world, technology is becoming a ubiquitous part of learning and learners are becoming more dependent on computers and laptops. This essay will discuss one of the main problems associated with dependence on computers and suggest a viable solution. The principal problems with over-reliance on technology such as computers and laptops are allowed them to use word processes with spell-checkers, hence it leads their handwriting and spelling may suffer. The second problem is that computers are expensive to maintain and can be unreliable. Furthermore, the plagiarism is one of the huge problems in order to work with laptops. For example, many teachers complain that students copy web pages straight from Wikipedia word for word rather than giving a reasoned answer to their questions. A solution to these worrying problems is that students should be able to write a letter by hand, in other words, they should sometimes utilise traditional sources of information such as books. Moreover, the solution of plagiarism is asking students to email their answers to teachers using anti-plagiarism software to detect copying. Then, students would be made aware of this practice and this would help them to answer the questions using their own words, rather than someone's else's. For instance, many universities already use this kind of software to scan course work for falsification and it could be extended to include all homework, by learners in both secondary and tertiary education. To conclude, one of the main problems of with over-use of computers is plagiarism and this can be solved through the use of plagiarism detection software.
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today
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world, technology is becoming a ubiquitous part of learning and learners are becoming more dependent on computers and laptops. This essay will discuss one of the main
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problems
associated with dependence on computers and suggest a viable solution.

The principal
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problems
with over-reliance on technology such as computers and laptops are
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allowed
them to
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use
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word
processes with spell-checkers,
hence
it leads their handwriting and spelling may suffer. The second
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problem
is that computers are expensive to maintain and can be unreliable.
Furthermore
, the
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plagiarism
is one of the huge
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problems
in order to work with laptops.
For example
,
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many
teachers complain that
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students
copy web pages straight from Wikipedia
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word
for
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word
rather
than giving a reasoned answer to their questions.

A solution to these worrying
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problems
is that
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students
should be able to write a letter by hand,
in other words
, they should
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sometimes
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utilise
traditional sources of information such as books.

Moreover
, the solution of
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plagiarism
is asking
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students
to email their answers to teachers using anti-plagiarism software to detect copying. Then,
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students
would
be made
aware of this practice and this would
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help
them to answer the questions using their
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own
words,
rather
than someone's else's.
For instance
,
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many
universities already
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use
this kind of software to scan course work for falsification and it could
be extended
to include all homework, by learners in both secondary and tertiary education.

To conclude
, one of the main
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problems
of with over-
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use
of computers is
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plagiarism
and this can
be solved
through the
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use
of
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plagiarism
detection software.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Students are becoming more and more reliant on computers What are some of the problems associated with reliance on computers, and what are some of the possible solutions? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
262 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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