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Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue. v.1

Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue. v. 1
Issues related to animal experimentation are frequently discussed these days, particularly in the media. It is often said that animals should not be used in testing because it is cruel and unnecessary. This essay will examine the arguments for and against animal testing. I belong to a biology background and I strongly believe that animal testing is an essential and crucial part before releasing any product in the market. Pharmaceutical industries have to spend billions of dollars in research and development and it takes them years before the drug even reaches human testing. Without the testing on animals like mice and rabbits, it will be almost impossible to determine the effects and efficacy of the product on humans. Let’s look around us – from hair products to sunscreens to skin lightening creams to beard oils – every batch has gone through rigorous testing cycles before it was deemed suitable for use on humans. Let us ask ourselves this question: Would we buy any product on the market if we knew that it will cause an allergic reaction or may be fatal on application? The answer is very simple! Not one person would even touch these items and we would have no usable drugs/creams/lotions on the shelves. However, I do see the point of the group that is against animal testing. Organizations like PETA, seem to propagate -very vividly and graphically – the idea that animal testing is the cruelest thing ever. Animals are living creatures and we should not be subjecting them to tests for our profit. However, in arguments like this, one needs to weigh the pros and cons of the situation in a logical way. Although I am completely on board the idea that there definitely is an ethical conundrum surrounding animal testing, in my opinion, the pros of animal testing far outweigh the cons.
Issues related to
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animal
experimentation are
frequently
discussed these days,
particularly
in the media. It is
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often
said that
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animals
should not be
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used
in
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testing
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because
it is cruel and unnecessary. This essay will examine the arguments for and against
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animal
testing.

I belong to a biology background and I
strongly
believe that
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animal
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testing
is an essential and crucial part
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before
releasing any
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product
in the market. Pharmaceutical industries
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have to
spend billions of dollars in research and development and it takes them years
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before
the drug even reaches human
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testing
. Without the
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testing
on
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animals
like mice and rabbits, it will be almost impossible to determine the effects and efficacy of the
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product
on humans.

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Let
’s look around us
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–
from hair
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products
to sunscreens to skin lightening creams to beard oils
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–
every batch has gone through rigorous
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testing
cycles
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before
it
was deemed
suitable for
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use
on humans.
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Let
us ask ourselves this question: Would we
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buy
any
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product
on the market if we knew that it will cause an allergic reaction or may be fatal on application? The answer is
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very
simple! Not one person would even touch these
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items and
we would have no usable drugs/creams/lotions on the shelves.

However
, I do
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see
the point of the group
that is
against
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animal
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testing
. Organizations like PETA, seem to propagate -
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very
vividly
and
graphically
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–
the
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idea
that
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animal
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testing
is the cruelest thing ever.
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Animals
are living
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creatures and
we should not be subjecting them to
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tests
for our profit.

However
, in arguments like this, one needs to weigh the pros and cons of the situation
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in a logical way
. Although I am completely on board the
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idea
that there definitely is an ethical conundrum surrounding
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animal
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testing
, in my opinion, the pros of
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animal
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testing
far outweigh the cons.
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IELTS essay Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
307 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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