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Big Salary is much more important than job satisfaction. v.15

Big Salary is much more important than job satisfaction. v. 15
Currently, Job is one of the precious things in the society. It is believed that for an employee wages is really necessary than having a satisfying job. This essay agrees with the view that big payment is much more significant than Job satisfaction. Firstly, this essay will discuss the responsibility of a family to carry the large amount of payment is really necessary and secondly, will criticize in a desirable Job often salary is low. It is evident that in present day enough money is indispensable for living a hassle free life. At times come when every man has to take his family's duty. Besides, all people has his own needs to accomplish where money is most needed. For example, sometimes a person sacrifice he wants for money. Therefore, sufficient or big amount of salary really needed. However, many persons get a job they wish. But often their claims that they are not getting big salaries while there are some other kind of job that they earn more. For instance, in Canada from a research they got that from 75% of employee 33% are paying a low salary in their satisfactory Job. So, people will do what is necessary for them. In conclusion, it seems that a large amount of salary is really essential than a satisfactory Job. Furthermore, to live a happy life sufficient money is most needed.
Currently
,
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Job
is one of the precious things in the society. It
is believed
that for an employee wages is
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really
Use "(necessary)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
necessary
than having a satisfying
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job
. This essay
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agrees
with the view that
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big
payment is much more significant than
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Job
satisfaction.
Firstly
, this essay will discuss the responsibility of a family to carry the large amount of payment is
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really
necessary and
secondly
, will criticize in a desirable
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Job
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often
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salary
is low.

It is evident that in present day
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enough
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money
is indispensable for living a hassle free life. At times
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come
when every
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man
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has to
take his family's duty.
Besides
, all
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people
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has
his
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own
needs to accomplish where
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money
is most needed.
For example
,
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sometimes
a person sacrifice he wants for
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money
.
Therefore
, sufficient or
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big
amount of
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salary
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really
needed.

However
,
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many
persons
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get
a
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job
they wish.
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But
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often
their claims that they are not getting
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big
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salaries
while there are
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some
other
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kind
of
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job
that they earn more.
For instance
, in Canada from a research they
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got
that from 75% of employee 33% are paying a low
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salary
in their satisfactory
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Job
.
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So
,
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people
will do what is necessary for them.

In conclusion
, it seems that a large amount of
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salary
is
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really
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essential
than a satisfactory
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Job
.
Furthermore
, to
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live
a happy life sufficient
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money
is most needed.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
21Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes
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IELTS essay Big Salary is much more important than job satisfaction. v. 15

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
229 words
This writing has been penalized,
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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