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Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue. v.2

Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue. v. 2
For the past few centuries, there has been a significant advancement in medical sciences. Experiments spanning over different animal species have resulted in important discoveries. Few people believe that doing testing on animals is cruel, while other argues that these experiments should continue to benefit mankind. This essay will analyse both pros and cons of conducting trials on animals. People favouring laboratory experiments on animals argue that it is the best way to research, analyse and observe effects of different medicines before testing them on human beings. Experiments conducted over animal species have resulted in the development of vital medicines including vaccines, drugs and antibiotics. For instance, polio which was a widespread disease in the mid-nineties was developed after rigorous testing on mice and monkeys, unavailability of these experimental subjects would have left the world in an epidemic state. Moreover, animal testing helps medical students to seek the required knowledge and advance in the research domain. Researchers also aim to minimise the suffering that animal experience. On the other hand, trials and experiments on animals are cruel and we have no moral right to take away their lives for the sake of our research work. Their existence and ecosystem should be respected. There are many alternates available to perform scientific research. In many countries, testing for the cosmetic industry on animal race in now prohibited. Moreover, experiments on animal species might not give us the same result as they have different anatomy and biological system than human beings. To conclude, the above provide solid arguments in highlighting merits and demerits of doing experiments on animals. In my opinion, the benefits outweigh the disadvantages, but research and evaluation should be done in a controlled way. The government should also set up strict policies and regulation which should keep the animal as an experimental subject in critical research purpose only.
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spanning over
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different
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animal
species have resulted in
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important
discoveries. Few
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people
believe that doing
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testing
on
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animals
is cruel, while other argues that these
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experiments
should continue to benefit mankind. This essay will
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analyse
both pros and cons of conducting trials on animals.

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People
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favouring
laboratory
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experiments
on
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animals
argue that it is the best way to
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research
,
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analyse
and observe effects of
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different
medicines
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before
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testing
them on human beings.
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Experiments
conducted over
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animal
species have resulted in the development of vital medicines including vaccines, drugs and antibiotics.
For instance
, polio which was a widespread disease in the mid-nineties
was developed
after rigorous
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testing
on mice and monkeys, unavailability of these experimental subjects would have
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left
the world in an epidemic state.
Moreover
,
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animal
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testing
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helps
medical students to seek the required knowledge and advance in the
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research
domain. Researchers
also
aim to
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minimise
the suffering that
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animal
experience.

On the other hand
, trials and
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experiments
on
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animals
are
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cruel and
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lives
for the sake of our
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research
work. Their existence and ecosystem should
be respected
. There are
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many
alternates available to perform scientific
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research
. In
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many
countries,
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testing
for the cosmetic industry on
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animal
race in
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now
prohibited.
Moreover
,
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experiments
on
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animal
species might not give us the same result as they have
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different
anatomy and biological system than human beings.

To conclude
, the above provide solid arguments in highlighting merits and demerits of doing
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experiments
on
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animals
. In my opinion, the benefits outweigh the disadvantages,
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but
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research
and evaluation should
be done
in a controlled way. The
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government
should
also
set up strict policies and regulation which should
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keep
the
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animal
as an experimental subject in critical
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research
purpose
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only
.
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IELTS essay Examine the arguments in favour of and against animal experiments, and come to a conclusion on this issue. v. 2

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  American English
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