At present, the responsibility of the school is one of the controversial issues. Some people consider that school has a charge of teaching students to become a moral value person as well as should add formal education in school better. In my opinion, I total agree with this ideal.
It is clear that there are some reasons why the school should do that. Because environmental education has more influence for many aspects of students such as their thinking, their behavior, and their solve-problems due to school is also like the second house of them. Schools offer knowledge and skills as a tool to prepare for them more mature in the future. Therefore, most time of children spends to stay in school. They have environment learning while practicing together. Thanks to, they will grow up and raise their awareness of their behavior from teachers and classmate.
Furthermore, school is only to help us mature person, owing to teaching and knowledge as well as the experience of all teachers. Thus, adding formal education which has more challenging for students to face up, it makes students stronger in the future.
In conclusion, there are reasons as I mentioned above, I believe that it is an excellent combination of education and it will be better for students in the further.
At present, the responsibility of the
school
is one of the controversial issues.
Some
people
consider that
school
has a charge of teaching
students
to become a moral value person
as well
as should
add
formal
education
in
school
better. In my opinion, I total
agree
with this ideal.
It is
clear
that there are
some
reasons why the
school
should do that.
Because
environmental
education
has more influence for
many
aspects of
students
such as their thinking, their behavior, and their solve-problems due to
school
is
also
like the second
house
of them.
Schools
offer knowledge and
skills
as a tool to prepare for them more mature in the future.
Therefore
, most time of children spends to stay in
school
. They have environment learning while practicing together. Thanks to, they will grow up and raise their awareness of their behavior from teachers and classmate.
Furthermore
,
school
is
only
to
help
us mature person, owing to teaching and knowledge
as well
as the experience of all teachers.
Thus
, adding formal
education
which has more challenging for
students
to face up, it
makes
students
stronger in the future.
In conclusion
, there are reasons as I mentioned above, I believe that it is an excellent combination of
education
and it will be better for
students
in the
further
.
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