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Everyone should follow a vegetarian diet because it is not necessary to eat meat to be healthy. Do you agree or disagree? v.2

Everyone should follow a vegetarian diet because it is not necessary to eat meat to be healthy. v. 2
Nowadays more and more people are concerned about their health. Some suggest meat consumption can lead to serious health damage and, therefore, find a vegetarianism to be a solution. In my opinion, although a vegetarian diet is certainly a healthy option, having a balanced diet, which contains vegetables and some healthy meat, is the key. Firstly, it must be admitted that having a vegetarian diet is certainly healthy. A diet which contains a high quantity of vegetables is rich in all the essential vitamins and minerals needed to promote health. In addition, avoiding red meats, which is said to lead to heart problems if eaten in large quantities, can also be beneficial. However, while having a vegetarian diet is certainly a healthy way to eat, not all meats are actually unhealthy. Take, for example fish, this meat contains vital omega 3 oils which are essential in building health and it is recommended by the medical profession to include fish in the diet at least once a week. Another illustration is white meat, such as chicken, this meat is also considered healthy when eaten in moderation. Finally, the key to health is to eat a balanced diet which consists of predominantly vegetables but also some healthy meats, namely fish and chicken. Having a balanced diet is generally more manageable for most people and would require only small changes in their current diet to see significant changes in their health. Although a vegetarian diet can be healthy, it is still best to have some meat in a daily diet
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damage and,
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, find a vegetarianism to be a solution. In my opinion, although a vegetarian diet is
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a vegetarian diet is
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. A diet which contains a high quantity of vegetables is rich in all the essential vitamins and minerals needed to promote
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health
.
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, avoiding red
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meats
, which
is said
to lead to heart problems if eaten in large quantities, can
also
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healthy
way to eat, not all
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meats
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for example
fish, this
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contains vital omega 3 oils which are essential in building
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health
and it
is recommended
by the medical profession to include fish in the diet at least once a week. Another illustration is white
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when eaten in moderation.

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generally
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significant
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, it is
still
best to have
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in a daily diet
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes
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IELTS essay Everyone should follow a vegetarian diet because it is not necessary to eat meat to be healthy. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
256 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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