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Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.7

Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. v. 7
Nowadays, it has become a trend among modern parents to give some amount of cash, which is commonly known as "pocket money". As many people believe that it has a positive impact in the development of the child, it could impact negatively too. However, I personally agree that it has many advantages in raising a smart kid and this essay will explain in detail. Firstly, there are a number of benefits that a child would receive by giving some money each week to spend or do anything they wish. For example, most of the parents give some amount of cash as a reward or a motivation when they some good behaviours in their child. Furthermore, some parents allocate a weekly target to encourage good behaviours or manners and promise a small cash prize. This would help the child to gain the habit of saving money and cash management etiquettes. As a result, the children will understand the importance of the value of money and how effectively, they should it to purchase something that they desire. However, the parents should educate their children and provide knowledge on what items they should be purchased or the proper ways of spending their collections. On the other side of the spectrum of giving money could be negatively impacting the children too. This happens when the parents do not take time to monitor how their children spend the cash collected. To illustrate, some working parents give money to their children to purchase what the child want as they do not have time, which could adversely impact the child to purchase things which are not appropriate for his age or health. A recent study shows, most of the young adults who are addicted to smoking are of working parents who give excess money to spend. In my opinion, I believe that a parent should give a considerable amount of money as a good behavioural practice and monitor how the child is using the money. This could teach them to be responsible and being accountable from a very young age. To conclude, providing some amount of cash has both pros and cons. It could be a good practice to teach cash management, ethics and promote good behaviours while if not properly guided it could be misguided too. Hence, the parents should take extra care when giving such cash rewards as it has many important learnings to life.
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people
believe that it has a
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positive
impact in the development of the
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child
, it could impact
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too.
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, I
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advantages in raising a smart kid and this essay will
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Firstly
, there are a number of benefits that a
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child
would receive by giving
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some
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money
each week to spend or do anything they wish.
For example
, most of the
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parents
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give
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some
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amount
of
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cash
as a reward or a motivation when they
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some
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good
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behaviours
in their
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child
.
Furthermore
,
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some
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parents
allocate a weekly target to encourage
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good
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behaviours
or manners and promise a
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small
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cash
prize. This would
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help
the
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child
to gain the habit of saving
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money
and
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cash
management
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etiquettes
.
As a result
, the
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children
will understand the importance of the value of
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money
and how
effectively
, they should it to
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purchase
something that they desire.
However
, the
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parents
should educate their
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children
and provide knowledge on what items they should be
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purchased
or the proper ways of spending their collections.

On the other side of the spectrum of giving
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money
could be
negatively
impacting the
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children
too. This happens when the
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parents
do not take time to monitor how their
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children
spend the
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cash
collected. To illustrate,
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some
working
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parents
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give
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money
to their
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children
to
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purchase
what the
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child
want as they do not have time, which could
adversely
impact the
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child
to
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purchase
things which are not appropriate for his age or health. A recent study
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shows
, most of the young adults who
are addicted
to smoking are of working
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parents
who
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give
excess
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money
to spend.

In my opinion, I believe that a
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parent
should
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give
a considerable
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amount
of
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money
as a
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good
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behavioural
practice and monitor how the
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child
is using the
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money
. This could teach them to be responsible and being accountable from a
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very
young age.

To conclude
, providing
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some
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amount
of
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cash
has both pros and cons. It could be a
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good
practice to teach
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cash
management, ethics and promote
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good
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behaviours
while if not
properly
guided it could
be misguided
too.
Hence
, the
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parents
should take extra care when giving such
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cash
rewards as it has
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many
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important
learnings to life.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Every one of us should become a vegetarian because eating meat can cause serious health problems. v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
400 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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