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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem? v.4

Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem? v. 4
Nowadays, we could see a huge food wasted at every corner on streets or waste bins. There are some causes making this problem, and of course, I will propose some solutions to diminish it. To begin with, I will list some reasons that lead to this issue. Firstly, people have a higher living standard; therefore, they pay less attention to food demand, as it does not seem to be the vital thing of the life. As a result, people buy much more food than they eat, prepare meal more than before; and at the end, people leave so much food on the table. Secondly, many food plants are producing many kind of food with a limitation of using day; this is a typical food waste at almost supermarkets. Take vegetable and fruits as example, these kinds of food have a short using day before it is expired and thrown to the recycle bin. To tackle these problems of food waste as I mentioned above, some actions people could do from now on. Firstly, from government side, they should execute a food campaign on their citizens, this enables people have more awareness about food status, and choose food responsibly. Secondly, food manufacturers should provide a suitable quantity of food to the market in order to the market itself consume all of food distribution. Finally, each person of us should share the food responsible consumption to diminish the food waste. To conclusion, the food security become seriously due to food waste. By pointing out the reason why people waste food, and submitting solutions to stop these issues, the future of humanity will be preserved.
Nowadays, we could
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see
a huge
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wasted at every corner on streets or
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waste
bins. There are
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some
causes making this problem, and
of course
, I will propose
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some
solutions to diminish it.

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begin
with, I will list
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some
reasons that lead to this issue.
Firstly
,
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people
have a higher living standard;
therefore
, they pay less attention to
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food
demand, as it does not seem to be the vital thing of the life.
As a result
,
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people
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buy
much more
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food
than they eat, prepare meal more than
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before
; and at the
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end
,
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people
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leave
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so
much
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food
on the table.
Secondly
,
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plants are producing
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of
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food
with a limitation of using day; this is a typical
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food
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waste
at almost supermarkets. Take vegetable and fruits as example, these kinds of
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food
have a short using day
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before
it
is expired
and thrown to the recycle bin.

To tackle these problems of
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food
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waste
as I mentioned above,
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some
actions
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people
could do from
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now
on.
Firstly
, from
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government
side, they should execute a
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food
campaign on their citizens, this enables
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people
have more awareness about
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food
status, and choose
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food
responsibly
.
Secondly
,
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food
manufacturers should provide a suitable quantity of
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food
to the market in order to the market itself consume all of
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food
distribution.
Finally
, each person of us should share the
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food
responsible consumption to diminish the
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food
waste.

To conclusion, the
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food
security become
seriously
due to
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food
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waste
. By pointing out the reason why
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people
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waste
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food
, and submitting solutions to
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stop
these issues, the future of humanity will
be preserved
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem? v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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