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Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem? v.3

Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem? v. 3
It is clear that, across the world, food wastage is a common phenomenon. There are multiple causes for this problem; and this is not something that can be solved in a single day. A collective effort is required, both from government and citizens to compact this issue. In this essay, I will explore some of the causes for food wastage and propose possible solutions. Firstly, In a country like India we do not have proper storage facilities and distribution channels for storing perishable items. As a result, vegetables like onions and tomatoes, which have very low shelf life is being wasted or thrown away. To illustrate this point, it has been estimated that every year close to Rs. 100 million worth of vegetable and fruits are rotting away, due to the lack of proper storage infrastructure. It is important for the government to do a thorough study of the distribution channels for these perishable items and come up with a plan to build facilities to store such items at proper locations across the country. Furthermore, every citizen in our country should take responsibility to prevent food wastage at his/her home. For instance, in India, lavish weddings and parties contribute close to 15% of the food wasted every day. It is important that, when we are planning for a function, we should also consider, means by which we can distribute the excess leftover food. Nowadays, they are many organizations which can help with this. To sum up, food wastage is a major concern in today's society and in my view, both government and individuals should take responsibility to address this issue and start with solutions proposed above.
It is
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clear
that, across the world,
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food
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wastage
is a common phenomenon. There are multiple causes for this problem; and this is not something that can
be solved
in a single day. A collective effort
is required
, both from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and citizens to compact this issue. In this essay, I will explore
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some of the
causes for
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food
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wastage
and propose possible solutions.

Firstly
, In a country like India we do not have proper storage facilities and distribution channels for storing perishable items.
As a result
, vegetables like onions and tomatoes, which have
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very
low shelf life is
being wasted
or thrown away. To illustrate this point, it has
been estimated
that every year close to Rs. 100 million worth of vegetable and fruits are rotting away, due to the lack of proper storage infrastructure. It is
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important
for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to do a thorough study of the distribution channels for these perishable items and
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come
up with a plan to build facilities to store such items at proper locations across the country.

Furthermore
, every citizen in our country should take responsibility to
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prevent
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food
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wastage
at his/her home.
For instance
, in India, lavish weddings and parties contribute close to 15% of the
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food
wasted every day. It is
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important
that, when we are planning for a function, we should
also
consider, means by which we can distribute the excess leftover
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food
. Nowadays, they are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
organizations which can
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help
with this.

To sum up,
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food
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wastage
is a major concern in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
's society and in my view, both
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and individuals should take responsibility to address this issue and
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start
with solutions proposed above.
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IELTS essay Every day, millions of tons of food are wasted all over the world. Why do you think this is happening? And how can we solve this problem? v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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