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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.5

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 5
Health care and well being of citizens should be of utmost importance for any country. There should be free of cost health facilities available for every citizen of the nation, even though they don’t get these facilities from up to date technological advancements in health care, until they are getting treated and are living healthy it is fine. This essay will discuss why I completely agree with this notion because this will contribute to a better economic growth and it is also a fundamental right of every national. Firstly, if the population of the country is healthy, they will contribute more towards the economic growth. Healthier people will be more productive and will be able to work more towards the advancement of the nation. For instance, countries like USA, Canada, and Australia are more developed and have a better growing economy as compared to nations like South Africa, Nigeria, Bangladesh because the basic healthcare is covered by the former nations and people don’t have to worry about their wellbeing. Therefore, they focus more on work and better livelihood which leads to better economic growth. Secondly, it is government’s duty to provide free health care to everyone as it is their fundamental right. People who are old aged, unemployed and poor cannot afford expensive basic health treatments, but right to live and lead a healthier life is their basic right. For example, governments collect taxes and they have a budget for every sector, health care sector should be given higher budgets and people who are rich and pay taxes should contribute in lifting up and contribute in giving equal rights to their fellow citizens who cannot afford. To conclude, this essay discussed why every nation should have complementary health care services as it leads to better economic growth and it is also a basic right for everyone to live a healthy life. Additionally, it also provided evidence to support this notion.
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well being
of citizens should be of utmost importance for any country. There should be free of cost
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health
facilities available for every citizen of the
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nation
,
even though
they don’t
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get
these facilities from up to date technological advancements in
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health
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care
, until they are getting treated and are living healthy it is fine. This essay will discuss why I completely
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agree
with this notion
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because
this will
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contribute
to a
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better
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economic
growth and it is
also
a fundamental
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right
of every national.

Firstly
, if the population of the country is healthy, they will
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contribute
more towards the
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economic
growth. Healthier
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people
will be more productive and will be able to work more towards the advancement of the
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nation
.
For instance
, countries
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like USA
, Canada, and Australia are more developed and have a
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better
growing economy as compared to
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nations
like South Africa, Nigeria, Bangladesh
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because
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healthcare
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people
don’t
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wellbeing
.
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, they focus more on work and
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better
livelihood which leads to
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better
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economic
growth.

Secondly
, it is
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government
’s duty to provide free
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health
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care
to everyone as it is their fundamental
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right
.
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who are
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old
aged, unemployed and poor cannot afford expensive
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basic
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health
treatments,
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but
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right
to
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live
and lead a healthier life is their
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basic
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right
.
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,
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governments
collect
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taxes and
they have a budget for every sector,
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health
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care
sector should be
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given
higher budgets and
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people
who are rich and pay taxes should
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contribute
in
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lifting up
and
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contribute
in giving equal
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rights
to their fellow citizens who cannot afford.

To conclude
, this essay discussed why every
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nation
should have complementary
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health
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care
services as it leads to
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better
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economic
growth and it is
also
a
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basic
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right
for everyone to
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live
a healthy life.
Additionally
, it
also
provided evidence to support this notion.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
44Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
320 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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