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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words. v.26

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 26
Providing good health service is the prime responsibility of the government. Over the last few decades, administrative bodies round the globe are paying attention towards an effective health care system. To a great extent, I agree with the fact that free of cost health care should be provided by all the countries even it includes the few exemptions of costly treatment. This essay will discuss my viewpoints on this statement with suitable examples. First of all, health is the subject of great importance to the any government. Governments are elected by the people and its their job to provide basic health facilities. For instance, in the capital city of India, Delhi, government runs street clinics which provide free treatment for all the people. Even though, the range of treatments provided is not very large, still this facility is helping natives in a positive manner. Secondly, administration receives a lot of income and revenue in the form of direct and indirect taxes. This can be used in developing infrastructure in underdeveloped areas. Also, poor people can use free health care for their families and can utilize their hard earned money in other areas. In other words, state bodies have enough funds and resources to establish as well as provide free medical facilities. On the other side, some disease needs latest medical resources for treatment which cannot be provided to the every individual. In such cases, the administration can collaborate with the various health organisations, for example, UNESCO or local NGO's. These organisations provide both monetary and medical aid to treat the patient. To sum up, cheap and good medical service is the right of every citizen of the nation. It is well agreed fact that the government can play crucial role in providing such arrangements.
Providing
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good
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health
service is the prime responsibility of the
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government
. Over the last few decades, administrative bodies round the globe are paying attention towards an effective
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health
care system. To a great extent, I
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agree with the fact that
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free
of cost
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health
care should
be provided
by all the countries even it includes the few exemptions of costly
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treatment
. This essay will discuss my viewpoints on this statement with suitable examples.

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First of all
,
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health
is the subject of great importance to the any
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government
.
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Governments
are elected
by the
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people
and
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its
their job to
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provide
basic
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health
facilities.
For instance
, in the capital city of India, Delhi,
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government
runs street clinics which
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provide
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free
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treatment
for all the
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people
.
Even though
, the range of
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treatments
provided is not
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very
large,
still
this facility is helping natives in a
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positive
manner.
Secondly
, administration receives
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a lot of
income and revenue in the form of direct and indirect taxes. This can be
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used
in developing infrastructure in underdeveloped areas.
Also
, poor
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people
can
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use
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free
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health
care for their families and can utilize their
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
hard earned
money in other areas.
In other words
, state bodies have
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enough
funds and resources to establish
as well
as
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provide
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free
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medical
facilities.

On the other side,
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some
disease needs
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latest
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medical
resources for
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treatment
which cannot
be provided
to the every individual. In such cases, the administration can collaborate with the various
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health
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organisations
,
for example
, UNESCO or local NGO's. These
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organisations
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provide
both monetary and
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medical
aid to treat the patient.

To sum up,
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cheap
and
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good
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medical
service is the right of every citizen of the nation. It is well
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agreed
fact that the
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government
can play crucial role in providing such arrangements.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 26

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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