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In some areas around the world, people are reviving the use of bicycle, while in some other parts the use of bicycles is fading away in favour of cars and motorbikes -what are the factors involved? what are the effects? v.1

In some areas around the world, people are reviving the use of bicycle, while in some other parts the use of bicycles is fading away in favour of cars and motorbikes -what are the factors involved? what are the effects? v. 1
Although first world nations are becoming increasingly interested in bicycle usage, this scenario is just opposite in third-world nations. This essay will discuss both the causes and effects of this approach. At the outset, environment and health are the main reasons behind the inclination of people towards bicycles, especially in developed countries. As less carbon is emitted from bicycles, so it has zero negative effects on the atmosphere. Moreover, because bicycling is considered as the best exercise, it could be used to take the health benefits. For instance, people who prefer bicycles over cars are found more healthy in a report published by the Health Department. Whereas, the use of cars could result in environmental degradation and passive lifestyle. Similarly, the civilians of the developing country tend to purchase cars and motorbikes rather than bicycles because of economic development. Increase in wages has made it possible to use cars as the main transport medium. Also, in such parts of the world, people consider cars as a vehicle of an affluent society. Thus, by purchasing a four-wheeler they can maintain their status in the local community. Moving towards the possible effects of this approach, by using bicycles, people can not only become more healthy but also it would be beneficial for the upliftment of the environment. It is because of no petroleum products are used to operate the bicycles. By reducing the dependency on fossil fuels, people can play their part to protect precious bio resources otherwise lack of resources could be detrimental for future generations. In the case of more preference to cars, in other parts of the world, would result in carbon emission from vehicles. Delhi is one of such metro cities already being suffered from polluted air affected badly because of the increment in vehicles. Also, it can increase traffic problems that would further lead to traffic jams and much valuable time of society will be wasted during communication. In conclusion, both the increment decrement in the bicycle use has different causes, while in some countries this trend has positive effects such as in the field of health and environment, others might be affected due to polluted air and traffic problems.
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first
world nations are becoming
increasingly
interested in
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bicycle
usage, this scenario is
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just
opposite in third-world nations. This essay will discuss both the causes and effects of this approach.

At the outset, environment and
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health
are the main reasons behind the inclination of
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people
towards
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bicycles
,
especially
in
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developed countries
. As less carbon
is emitted
from
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bicycles
,
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so
it has zero
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negative
effects on the atmosphere.
Moreover
,
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because
bicycling
is considered
as the best exercise, it could be
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used
to take the
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health
benefits.
For instance
,
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people
who prefer
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bicycles
over
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cars
are found
more healthy in a report published by the
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Health
Department. Whereas, the
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use
of
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cars
could result in environmental degradation and passive lifestyle.
Similarly
, the civilians of the
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developing country
tend to
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purchase
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cars
and motorbikes
rather
than
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bicycles
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because
of economic development. Increase in wages has made it possible to
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use
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cars
as the main transport medium.
Also
, in such parts of the world,
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people
consider
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cars
as a vehicle of an affluent society.
Thus
, by purchasing a four-wheeler they can maintain their status in the local community.

Moving towards the possible effects of this approach, by using
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bicycles
,
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people
can not
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only
become more healthy
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but
also
it would be beneficial for the
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upliftment
of the environment. It is
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because
of no petroleum products are
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used
to operate the
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bicycles
. By reducing the dependency on fossil fuels,
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people
can play their part to protect precious bio resources
otherwise
lack of resources could be detrimental for future generations. In the case of more preference to
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cars
, in other parts of the world, would result in carbon emission from vehicles. Delhi is one of such metro cities already
being suffered
from polluted air
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affected
badly
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because
of the increment in vehicles.
Also
, it can increase traffic problems that would
further
lead to traffic jams and much valuable time of society will
be wasted
during communication.

In conclusion
, both the increment decrement in the
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bicycle
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use
has
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different
causes, while in
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some
countries this trend has
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positive
effects such as in the field of
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health
and environment, others might be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
affected
due to polluted air and traffic problems.
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IELTS essay In some areas around the world, people are reviving the use of bicycle, while in some other parts the use of bicycles is fading away in favour of cars and motorbikes -what are the factors involved? what are the effects? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
363 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
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Task Achievement: 8.0
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