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Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at the best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. To what extent do you agree with this statement? v.10

Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at the best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. v. 10
Although there are various medicines to cure an unhealthy patient, the attraction towards the alternate form of tablets has been increased in the modern days. As these types of drugs are deleterious to our health, and sometimes not effective, we must start to avoid them. Not only side effects is the problem of using these drugs, but also some doesn't work as prescribed; however, I would agree with the above statements and we will ponder the negatives of using these pharmaceuticals in this passage. While there were a plethora of drawbacks in using alternative forms of drugs, the side effects of using those plays a vital role. Firstly, the use of these pharmaceuticals may lead to have other health problems, but fails to resolve the particular disease; moreover, sometimes they may lead towards death. Most noticeable of all, the consumption of these drugs leads to different health issues such as brain trauma, headache because of the chemicals that were used in it, so we must follow some methods before having them. In addition to this, there were situations where many people died because of the incorrect dosage of these drugs, and hence, they must consult the doctor before having these medications. While the points referenced here seem convincing, we still have one more persuasive topic to cover. As these drugs were prepared with the mixture of numerous chemicals, sometimes they would fail to show their effect on the patient. Citizens need to spend too much of their income in order to purchase these medicines; furthermore, these remedies were not hygienic to consume because of using a combination of chemicals. Even though some remedies might work, purchasing of these would cost more when compared to other pharmaceuticals, so people who were unable to afford that amount fails to use these drugs; for example, a survey released by the government shows that the drugs, which were required to cure a disease named dengue costs higher the hospital cost because of the power of the medicine. Meanwhile, though a person could be able to afford these medications, the ineffectiveness was leading them not to be hygienic, and was making the patient to face alternative complications. The supporting points show the reasons for agreeing with the above statement. In conclusion, the utilization of these optional forms of medications must be avoided because of irrelevant chemicals used in them, and hence, we must agree with the above statement. These tablets might lead us towards extra diseases instead of curing of the present disease, and sometimes these may cause death.
Although there are various medicines to cure an unhealthy patient, the attraction towards the alternate form of tablets has
been increased
in the modern days. As these types of
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drugs
are deleterious to our health, and
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sometimes
not effective, we
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must
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start
to avoid them. Not
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only
side effects is the problem of using these
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drugs
,
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but
also
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some
doesn't work as prescribed;
however
, I would
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agree
with the above
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
statements and
we will ponder the negatives of using these pharmaceuticals in this passage.

While there were a plethora of drawbacks in using alternative forms of
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drugs
, the side effects of using those plays a vital role.
Firstly
, the
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use
of these pharmaceuticals may
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lead
to have other health problems,
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but
fails to resolve the particular
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disease
;
moreover
,
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sometimes
they may
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lead
towards death. Most noticeable of all, the consumption of these
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drugs
leads to
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different
health issues such as brain trauma, headache
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because
of the
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chemicals
that were
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used
in it,
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so
we
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must
follow
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some
methods
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before
having them.
In addition
to this, there were situations where
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many
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people
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died
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because
of the incorrect dosage of these
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drugs
, and
hence
, they
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must
consult the doctor
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before
having these medications. While the points referenced here seem convincing, we
still
have one more persuasive topic to cover.

As these
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drugs
were prepared
with the mixture of numerous
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chemicals
,
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sometimes
they would fail to
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show
their effect on the patient. Citizens need to spend too much of their income in order to
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purchase
these medicines;
furthermore
, these remedies were not hygienic to consume
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because
of using a combination of
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chemicals
.
Even though
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some
remedies might work, purchasing of these would cost more when compared to other pharmaceuticals,
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so
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people
who were unable to afford that amount fails to
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use
these
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drugs
;
for example
, a survey released by the
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government
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shows
that the
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drugs
, which
were required
to cure a
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disease
named dengue costs higher the hospital cost
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the power of the medicine. Meanwhile, though a person could be able to afford these medications, the ineffectiveness was leading them not to be hygienic, and was making the patient to face alternative complications. The supporting points
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show
the reasons for agreeing with the above statement.

In conclusion
, the utilization of these optional forms of medications
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must
be avoided
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because
of irrelevant
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chemicals
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used
in them, and
hence
, we
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must
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agree
with the above statement. These tablets might
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lead
us towards extra
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diseases
instead
of curing of the present
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disease
, and
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sometimes
these may cause death.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Currently there is a trend towards the use of alternative forms of medicine. However, at the best these methods are ineffective, and at worst they may be dangerous. v. 10

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
424 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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