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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.25

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 25
These days, modern people are willing to receive a free health service in order to maintain their lustiness. In this regard, many people are reckoned to think that the authorities should provide the citizens with health care facilities, medicines and drugs. However, others feel that these kinds of methods are not suitable for the government policy, as the state cannot implement such kinds of reform because of shortage of the government budget. Personally, I believe that the big companies should donate the money for the development of health services. On the one hand, it is true that the lack of investment is a main problem. In this reason, the state cannot promote the free services. Furthermore, if the citizens are provided with free facilities, they can neglect their well-being. To illustrate, the children can eat more candy and sweets, if they know that the dentist will treat them. In addition, the expenses of this field will be increased, if they do not pay for their treatment, as they will be keen to neglect their well-being. On the other hand, it is clear that the affordable lustiness can be beneficial for the poor families, as many individuals passed away because of high prices for the treatment. Moreover, many individuals believe that the main cause of high prices is the lack of money. In this regard, the citizens tend to think that the big companies’ donation can solve the problem. For instance, many people have gained serious illnesses and diseases because of their work. In this reason, they are willing to take compensation from them. To conclude, although many people are reckoned to think that the authorities should provide the people with free treatments, the lack of money is the main cause of this problem. In addition to this, people can neglect their well-being, if they do not pay for their medicines. However, I believe that the donation of big companies can alleviate this issue.
These days, modern
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people
are willing to receive a
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free
health service in order to maintain their lustiness. In this regard,
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many
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people
are reckoned
to
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think
that the authorities should provide the citizens with health care facilities, medicines and drugs.
However
, others feel that these kinds of methods are not suitable for the
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government
policy, as the state cannot implement such kinds of reform
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because
of shortage of the
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government
budget.
Personally
, I believe that the
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big
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companies
should donate the money for the development of health services.

On the one hand, it is true that the lack of investment is a main problem. In this reason, the state cannot promote the
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free
services.
Furthermore
, if the citizens
are provided
with
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free
facilities, they can neglect their well-being. To illustrate, the children can eat more candy and sweets, if they know that the dentist will treat them.
In addition
, the expenses of this field will
be increased
, if they do not pay for their treatment, as they will be keen to neglect their well-being.

On the other hand
, it is
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clear
that the affordable lustiness can be beneficial for the poor families, as
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many
individuals passed away
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because
of high prices for the treatment.
Moreover
,
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many
individuals believe that the main cause of high prices is the lack of money. In this regard, the citizens tend to
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think
that the
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big
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companies
’ donation can solve the problem.
For instance
,
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many
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people
have gained serious illnesses and diseases
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because
of their work. In this reason, they are willing to take compensation from them.

To conclude
, although
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many
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people
are reckoned
to
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think
that the authorities should provide the
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people
with
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free
treatments, the lack of money is the main cause of this problem.
In addition
to this,
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people
can neglect their well-being, if they do not pay for their medicines.
However
, I believe that the donation of
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big
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companies
can alleviate this issue.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 25

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
323 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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