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Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 1
Apart from food and water, health care needs are fundamental to human survival. For this, many people are proposing for countries to provide these services free to their citizens even if the expensive ones such as the newer therapeutic options are not included. I completely agree with this viewpoint. To begin, if these medical services are made free to everyone it will strengthen the nations Human Resources. In other words, providing the medical treatment to people with no financial charge will increase patronage and reduce mortality rate, hence, ensuring that countries have healthy manpower. Again, this will ensure that quality medication is delivered, as there will be less fake drugs from illegal drug producing companies. For instance, in the US, the producers of imitations of antenatal medications stopped their production when the government made antenatal care free for women. In addition, the idea of free hospital services will also ensure that universal health care coverage is achieved. It implies that both the rich and the poor will have equal access to medical services. Take for example, in Australia, every resident irrespective of social status assess health services in the same place without charge. Other advantages it have include the reduction in medical tourism among the wealthy and will also discourage the use of harmful herbal medications that were patronized because while orthodox medicines were unaffordable. In summary, this essay discussed, and I agree completely, that countries providing medical services free to its citizens will not only strengthen their workforce but also ensure that universal health coverage is achieved and maintained.
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health
care needs are fundamental to human survival. For this,
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many
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are proposing for countries to provide these
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services
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free
to their citizens even if the expensive ones such as the newer therapeutic options are not included. I completely
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agree
with this viewpoint.

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begin
, if these
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medical
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services
are made
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free
to everyone it will strengthen the nations Human Resources.
In other words
, providing the
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medical
treatment to
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people
with no financial charge will increase patronage and
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reduce
mortality rate,
hence
, ensuring that countries have healthy manpower. Again, this will ensure that quality medication
is delivered
, as there will be less fake drugs from illegal drug producing
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companies
.
For instance
, in the US, the producers of imitations of antenatal medications
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stopped
their production when the
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government
made antenatal care
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free
for women.

In addition
, the
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idea
of
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free
hospital
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will
also
ensure that universal
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health
care coverage
is achieved
. It implies that both the rich and the poor will have equal access to
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medical
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services
. Take
for example
, in Australia, every resident irrespective of social status assess
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health
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services
in the same place without charge. Other advantages it have
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include
the reduction in
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medical
tourism among the wealthy and will
also
discourage the
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use
of harmful herbal medications that
were patronized
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because
while orthodox medicines were unaffordable.

In summary, this essay discussed, and I
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agree
completely, that countries providing
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medical
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services
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free
to its citizens will not
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only
strengthen their workforce
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but
also
ensure that universal
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coverage
is achieved
and maintained.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
20Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Every country should have a free health service, even if this means that the latest medical treatments may not be available through the service because they are too expensive. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
260 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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