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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children. v.2

It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children. v. 2
There is a universal consensus that children ought to be taught how to differentiate good deeds from wrongdoings. It is therefore believed that serving punishments for doing wrong is necessary in learning this distinction. I completely agree with this point of view. I am also of the opinion that withdrawing certain privileges and being asked to kneel or face the wall are some that can be used to punish children for any bad behaviour. To begin, children can probably differentiate between good or bad when their behaviours are appropriately rewarded. For doing what is bad, a child ought to be told and also made to face the consequences. By so doing, it gets registered into their sub-consciousness that every behaviour will be followed by commensurate reward, and in the case of bad behaviour, it is to be punished. As regards how children should be made to realise they have offended, perhaps the most likely thing parent ought to do is to take away some fringe benefits. For instance, some of these will be to reduce leisure time used in watching TV, or browsing on the internet. Similarly, extra chores can also be given to any child that erred. In addition, tutors in schools can also possibly give extra home work to children that disobeyed in the classroom. Lastly, children following any offence can also be made to kneel down or required to face the wall for a period of time. By doing this, they are being trained to know that for every wrong action or step taken, an equal corrective measure will be faced. In conclusion, it appears logical to agree that punishing children help them to know the difference between right and wrong at their formative years. There also exist varying punishment measures that can be utilized for this purpose.
There is a universal consensus that
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children
ought to
be taught
how to differentiate
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good
deeds from wrongdoings. It is
therefore
believed that serving punishments for
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doing
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wrong
is necessary in learning this distinction. I completely
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agree
with this point of view. I am
also
of the opinion that withdrawing certain privileges and
being asked
to kneel or face the wall are
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some
that can be
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used
to punish
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children
for any
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bad
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behaviour
.

To
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begin
,
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children
can
probably
differentiate between
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good
or
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bad
when their
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behaviours
are
appropriately
rewarded. For
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doing
what is
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bad
, a child ought to be
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told
and
also
made to face the consequences. By
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so
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doing
, it
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gets
registered into their sub-consciousness that every
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behaviour
will
be followed
by commensurate reward, and in the case of
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bad
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behaviour
, it is to
be punished
.

As regards how
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children
should
be made
to
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realise
they have offended, perhaps the most likely thing parent ought to do is to take away
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some
fringe benefits.
For instance
,
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some
of these will be to
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reduce
leisure time
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used
in watching TV, or browsing on the internet.
Similarly
, extra chores can
also
be
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given
to any child that erred.
In addition
, tutors in schools can
also
possibly
give extra home work to
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children
that disobeyed in the classroom.
Lastly
,
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children
following any
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offence
can
also
be made
to kneel down or required to face the wall for a period of time. By
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doing
this, they are
being trained
to know that for every
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wrong
action or step taken, an equal corrective measure will
be faced
.

In conclusion
, it appears logical to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that punishing
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children
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
them to know the difference between right and
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wrong
at their formative years. There
also
exist varying punishment measures that can
be utilized
for this purpose.
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15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior to children. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
301 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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  • Check your writing for errors
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    Present relevant ideas
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