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Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? v.5

Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? v. 5
Nowadays, it's a general saying that, the needy's are in every nation of the world, also, each sovereign state has their peculiar ways of combating this situation. This essay will state and explain the causes of global dependency, before proffering an assistance mechanism to this menace. To begin with, the most tremendous cause of lack in our society is poor standard of education and laziness of the working population. First of all, the teaching standards of our schools and colleges are in a deplorable state. Our graduates are not properly trained to solve problems, thereby making them unemployable or ' half-baked'. For example, Mr Victor a graduate of electrical and electronics Engineering could not fix his room's electrical issue. To continue with, the young populace this generation is lazy and are very ambitious. They possess a mind of entitlement, thereby sitting at home and expecting riches from the government. An example of, the youth of the oil-rich, Niger Delta region of Nigeria believed the oil belongs and be managed by them without the government interference, so they stay at home expecting the government to provide for them. Fortunately, however, there are many ways of supporting the needy, such as, investing in the educational sector, re-orientating the populace and making investor's friendly policies. Firstly, increasing the standards of learning, like creating more employment friendly curriculums and retraining of students, graduates and teachers to properly serve the community. For instance, addition of courses, such as business and critical thinking, capacity development, and so on, can improve the ability of the attendees. Secondly, re-orientation of the citizen on the need to work, while also making policies that favours internment, so as to create more job opportunities. An illustration of China in the year 1980, the made law to reduce tax for start-up companies, encouraged their people to work and enforced the firms to employ 85% of their citizen as workers. In conclusion, low level of education and laziness are the major cause of lack in the universe today. On the other hand, proper investment in education, frequent re-orientation of the populace and making investment friendly laws are suggested to curb this menace.
Nowadays, it's a general saying that, the needy's are in every nation of the world,
also
, each sovereign state has their peculiar ways of combating this situation. This essay will state and
explain
the causes of global dependency,
before
proffering an assistance mechanism to this menace.

To
begin
with, the most tremendous cause of lack in our society is poor standard of education and laziness of the working population.
First of all
, the teaching standards of our schools and colleges are in a deplorable state. Our graduates are not
properly
trained to solve problems, thereby making them unemployable or
'
half-baked'.
For example
, Mr Victor a graduate of electrical and electronics Engineering could not
fix
his room's electrical issue. To continue with, the young populace this generation is lazy and are
very
ambitious. They possess a mind of entitlement, thereby sitting at home and expecting riches from the
government
. An example of, the youth of the oil-rich, Niger Delta region of Nigeria believed the oil belongs and
be managed
by them without the
government
interference,
so
they stay at home expecting the
government
to provide for them.

Fortunately
,
however
, there are
many
ways of supporting the needy, such as, investing in the educational sector, re-orientating the populace and making investor's friendly policies.
Firstly
, increasing the standards of learning, like creating more employment friendly curriculums and retraining of students, graduates and teachers to
properly
serve the community.
For instance
, addition of courses, such as business and critical thinking, capacity development, and
so
on, can
improve
the ability of the attendees.
Secondly
, re-orientation of the citizen on the need to work, while
also
making policies that
favours
internment,
so as to
create more job opportunities. An illustration of China in the year 1980, the made law to
reduce
tax for
start
-up
companies
, encouraged their
people
to work and enforced the firms to employ 85% of their citizen as workers.

In conclusion
, low level of education and laziness are the major cause of lack in the universe
today
.
On the other hand
, proper investment in education, frequent re-orientation of the populace and making investment friendly laws
are suggested
to curb this menace.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Every country has poor people and every country has different ways of dealing with the poor. What are some of the reasons for world poverty? How can the poor be helped? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
359 words
8.5
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