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Essay topics: You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter1) Explain your situation2) Say why you feel unsure about v.1

Essay topics: You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter1) Explain your situation2) Say why you feel unsure about v. 1
In the upcoming time, more individuals would suffer due to health related issues then ever before. I completely agree with this statement and in this essay I will elucidate some of the reasons to support my argument. One point to consider is that since the global population is increasing; therefore, traffic on roads have also increased drastically. It is well known that cars, which are commonly used as a mode of transportation across the globe, is one of the primary reasons of air pollution because they emit carbon-dioxide into the atmosphere. Although they are equipped with filters to purify the exhaust, but still the concentration of this hazardous gas is too high and can seriously harm human respiratory system. Not only it is harmful for the humans, but it also deplete our ozone layer, eventually ultraviolet rays can enter our atmosphere, which can potentially harm our skin as it might cause skin related disease such as skin cancer. Another point to consider is that, if the farmers have to meet the intense demand of food supply, it is necessary to speed up the process of crop cultivation. Unfortunately, in order to achieve their goal, they are using chemical fertilizers, which could probably turn fatal if consumed by individuals for a long period of time. For instance, a recent study carried out by an eminent doctor Andrew James at Columbia University revealed that people who eat vegetables, which were cultivated by using chemical fertilisers, faced health related issues once they were over the age of fifty years. The study also found that the life expectancy was also reduced by ten years. Beside this, both state and central government have decreased the funding of medical research, and this indeed has been one of the main reasons why we might suffer to fight serious diseases in near future. All the above-discussed assertions, let to the conclusion that, pollution and crop harvesting are some of the primary reasons why people's health would decline in near future.
In the upcoming time, more individuals would suffer due to health related issues then ever
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before
. I completely
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agree
with this statement and in this essay I will elucidate
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some of the
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reasons
to support my argument.

One point to consider is that since the global population is increasing;
therefore
, traffic on roads have
also
increased
drastically
. It is well known that cars, which are
commonly
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used
as a mode of transportation across the globe, is one of the primary
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reasons
of air pollution
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because
they emit carbon-dioxide into the atmosphere. Although they
are equipped
with filters to purify the exhaust,
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but
still
the concentration of this hazardous gas is too high and can
seriously
harm human respiratory system. Not
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only
it is harmful for the humans,
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but
it
also
Did you mean "depletes"?
deplete
our ozone layer,
eventually
ultraviolet rays can enter our atmosphere, which can
potentially
harm our skin as it might cause skin related disease such as skin cancer.

Another point to consider is that, if the farmers
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have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
the intense demand of food supply, it is necessary to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
speed up
the process of crop cultivation. Unfortunately, in order to achieve their goal, they are using chemical fertilizers, which could
probably
turn fatal if consumed by individuals for a long period of time.
For instance
, a recent study carried out by an eminent doctor Andrew James at Columbia University revealed that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who eat vegetables, which
were cultivated
by using chemical
Do not mix variants of the same word ('fertiliser' and 'fertilizer') within a single text.
fertilisers
, faced health related issues once they were over the age of fifty years. The study
also
found that the life expectancy was
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
by ten years. Beside this, both state and central
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
have decreased the funding of medical research, and this
indeed
has been one of the main
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reasons
why we might suffer to fight serious diseases in near future.

All the above-discussed assertions,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
to the conclusion that, pollution and crop harvesting are
If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?
some of the
primary
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reasons
why
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
's health would decline in near future.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Essay topics: You have been offered a job that will require you to move to a city that you have never visited before. You have a friend who lives there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter1) Explain your situation2) Say why you feel unsure about v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
332 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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