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1659 third Describe a photo you likeYou Should SayWhere the photo was takenWho took the photoWhat can be seen from the photoAnd explain why you like this photo v.1

1659 third Describe a photo you likeYou Should SayWhere the photo was takenWho took the photoWhat can be seen from the photoAnd explain why you like this photo v. 1
Pieces of communication that the advertising corporation puts out nowadays are on a constant high. Some people believe that few of the ways that the management uses to put these out are unprincipled and unacceptable in the current era. This essay will argue that the methods used by the advertising fraternity are completely required. In recent times with the rise of advertising on Social Media, the amount of content that is consumed by consumers is very high. It is justifiable, because of the consumption potential, brands have moved to being opportunistic than ever before which has led to the rise of them being unethical. Moreover, it's unacceptable at times. Methods of ads or filling unwanted surveys before accessing a website are part of a world we live in. For example, lingerie ads should not be shown to a 6 year old boy who is trying to stream his latest episode of Ramayana. Furthermore, YouTube need not ask me to answer 5 questions before I start watching the video i desire. Social Media is an ever growing business and with every new day there's a new quirk the masses are introduced to. However, with the unfolding of the digital era viewing of these ads and filling out surveys need to become a must. We're living in partial oblivion where more than half of us are unaware of what's happening around us and these methods of the ad industry help us go a notch higher by helping us. For example, 73% of Indians did not know the exact day of elections till the Indian Government put an ad on YouTube. In addition to that, a Survey on Visa norms for travelling to the USA led to the process being simplified for everybody on Social Media. Opportunities taken up by brands have been proven to be more beneficial than harmful. This essay argued why various ways of communication in today's world should become a mandate as they are more than helpful to one and all. In my opinion, social media users need to be mandated to fill 5 surveys a day and should be exposed to the advertisements in order to have uninterrupted experience through the day.
Pieces of communication that the advertising corporation puts out nowadays are on a constant high.
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Some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
believe that few of the ways that the management
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
uses
to put these
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out
are unprincipled
and unacceptable in the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
current
era. This essay will argue that the methods
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
by the advertising fraternity are completely required.

In recent times with the rise of advertising on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Media
, the amount of content that
is consumed
by consumers is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
high. It is justifiable,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of the consumption potential, brands have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
to being
Use "(opportunistic)" to make a comparison with this adjective.
opportunistic
than ever
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
which has led to the rise of them being unethical.
Moreover
, it's unacceptable at times. Methods of ads or filling unwanted
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
surveys
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
accessing a website are part of a world we
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in.
For example
, lingerie ads should not
be shown
to a 6 year
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
boy who is trying to stream his latest episode of Ramayana.
Furthermore
, YouTube need not ask me to answer 5 questions
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
watching the video
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
desire.
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Social
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Media
is an ever growing business and with every new day there's a new quirk the masses
are introduced
to.

However
, with the unfolding of the digital era viewing of these ads and filling out
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
surveys
need to become a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
. We're living in partial oblivion where more than half of us are unaware of what's happening around us and these methods of the ad industry
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
us go a notch higher by helping us.
For example
, 73% of Indians did not know the exact day of elections till the Indian
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Government
put an ad on YouTube.
In addition
to that, a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Survey
on Visa norms for travelling to the USA led to the process
being simplified
for everybody on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
Media
. Opportunities taken up by brands have
been proven
to be more beneficial than harmful.

This essay argued why various ways of communication in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
today
's world should become a mandate as they are more than helpful to one and all. In my opinion,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
users need to
be mandated
to fill 5
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
surveys
a day and should
be exposed
to the advertisements in order to have uninterrupted experience through the day.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes
Speak a new language so that the world will be a new world.
Rumi

IELTS essay 1659 third Describe a photo you likeYou Should SayWhere the photo was takenWho took the photoWhat can be seen from the photoAnd explain why you like this photo v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
364 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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