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Essay topics: Essay topics: You recently moved to a new apartment. Write to your friend and say- Why did you move there- Describe the new apartment- Invite him/her to visit you v.1

Essay topics: Essay topics: You recently moved to a new apartment. Write to your friend and say- Why did you move there- Describe the new apartment- Invite him/her to visit you v. 1
Owing the problems related to climate change, some think that we should get used to live with them rather than trying to prevent it. In my opinion, however, I disagree with doing nothing with the problem as I think if it's not prevented in the next few years, we won't no longer be able to live on earth. Firstly, one of the main problems that concerns people about climate change is the general increase in the worldwide temperature. Most of the pollution produced by the massive use of cars as well as the industries is damaging the earth's upper layers such as the atmosphere, which prevent us from being hit by the sun's ultraviolet light. Because of that, weather in a lot of the planet' areas has increased in such a quick way that in some of the hottest zones life has begun to be a problem. On the other hand, not only the general surface temperature it's a problem, but also the change in the water's one. If seawater is continued to be highly warmed its range of salinity will drop down, so as a consequence the biodiversity and species living it will suffer a damage. In addition, the water used to feed farm and industry animals we consume, such as cows or pigs, will not be enough for all of them and humans won't be able to eat that kind of animals. In conclusion, I think that far from being something to ignore, climate change is a scary reality we need to face and prevent if we want to keep enjoying life on earth.
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people
about climate
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change
is the general increase in the worldwide temperature. Most of the pollution produced by the massive
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use
of cars
as well
as the industries is damaging the earth's upper layers such as the atmosphere, which
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by the sun's ultraviolet light.
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of the hottest zones life has begun to be a problem.

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in the water's one. If seawater
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.
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to feed farm and industry animals we consume, such as cows or pigs, will not be
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enough
for all of them and humans won't be able to eat that kind of animals.

In conclusion
, I
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think
that far from being something to
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, climate
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change
is a scary reality we need to face and
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prevent
if we want to
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keep
enjoying life on earth.
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IELTS essay Essay topics: Essay topics: You recently moved to a new apartment. Write to your friend and say- Why did you move there- Describe the new apartment- Invite him/her to visit you v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
266 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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