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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, naot individuals because individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.1

Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, naot individuals because individuals can do too little. v. 1
There is an on-going debate that the authorities should be responsible in protecting the environment and not the citizens who are rarely capable for this role. In my opinion, I completely agree with this view. To begin with, taking up responsibilities as much to do with strengths and abilities. In other words, a person can effectively carry out a task only if he or she is capable to achieve it. It is obvious that the government are often well-equipped with all necessary tools to environmentally protect the country such as income from tax(fund), aids from developed countries (expertise and equipments) and so on. Therefore, it would be unfair to saddle a common citizen with huge responsibilities such as environmental protection that is naturally the duty of elected-government officials. Making the environment clean and habitable should be the one of the major aim of the state. This is due to the fact that these officials can conveniently provide all equipments and services to make the environment better and worth living in; by providing waste bins, establishing recycling facilities, creating drainage systems and so on. Another point to consider is that the environment can only be protected if the citizens are well informed about how to make their environment clean and threats of unsafe environment. However, it is the duty of the government to enlighten the individuals on how to protect their environment by using social media, television and radio stations. For example, in China, there is a government-sponsored program which daily educate the people on proper disposal of waste and even on waste recycling. As a result of this, many citizens often dispose their refuse in an eco-friendly manner and this, in turn, makes the country free from environmental pollution. In conclusion, governments should independently carry out the duty of protecting the environment, as the citizens have no adequate facilities to do so.
There is an
Did you mean "ongoing"?
on-going
debate that the authorities should be responsible in protecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
and not the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
who are rarely capable for this role. In my opinion, I completely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
with this view.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, taking up responsibilities as much to do with strengths and abilities.
In other words
, a person can
effectively
carry out a task
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
if he or she is capable to achieve it. It is obvious that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
are
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often
well-equipped with all necessary tools to
environmentally
protect the country such as income from tax(fund), aids from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
developed countries
(expertise and equipments) and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.
Therefore
, it would be unfair to saddle a common
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizen
with huge responsibilities such as environmental protection
that is
naturally
the duty of elected-
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
officials. Making the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
clean and habitable should be the one of the major aim of the state.
This is due to the fact that
these officials can
conveniently
provide all equipments and services to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
better and worth living in; by providing waste bins, establishing recycling facilities, creating drainage systems and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
on.

Another point to consider is that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
be protected
if the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
are
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
well informed
about how to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
clean and threats of unsafe
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
.
However
, it is the duty of the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
to enlighten the individuals on how to protect their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
by using social media, television and radio stations.
For example
, in China, there is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
-sponsored program which daily educate the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
on proper disposal of waste and even on waste recycling.
As a result
of this,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
dispose their refuse
Consider replacing "in an eco-friendly manner" with the adverb for "eco-friendly"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in an eco-friendly manner
and this, in turn,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the country free from environmental pollution.

In conclusion
,
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governments
should
independently
carry out the duty of protecting the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
environment
, as the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
citizens
have no adequate facilities to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
.
14Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, naot individuals because individuals can do too little. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
312 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
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