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Environmental problems such as pollution and Climate variation are increasing nowadays. The government have taken some measurement at a global level but they only get few solution. why is it so? how can this problem be solved? v.1

Environmental problems such as pollution and Climate variation are increasing nowadays. The government have taken some measurement at a global level but they only get few solution. why is it so? how can this problem be solved? v. 1
Nowadays, Atmosphere issues are common in every country such as pollution and climate change are rapidly grown up while, the government has duties to take some crucial decisions for the Intercontinental. There are many hurdles of this matter as well as a number of remedies. Pollution, meanwhile, introduced by local people in many countries. People who Habit to throw a rubbish here and there. For example person who always eat chocolate and wrapper of it throws away to the road and anywhere else However, In some native land government decided the penalty for throwing garbage and also have to declare find. It is a minor crime in many states, but still pollution is increasing day by day. It is the responsibility of Management for awareness of people's. It is a matter of countries development. So government should create seminar to the people's awareness. Pollution is directly affected by the climate. Drought, flood and rising sea level are common problems in every country. Though people who responsible for it, They have no idea what type of mistake they have done. However, after the climate humanity who suffered from the climate they have right to take funds from the insurance company or government. Moreover money is the not only way for developing of the nation, but countries owner has to create a major Low for reducing pollution and try to control the climate change. The major solution of this problem are-People should be encouraged by government. For example, Education person can understand the value of cleanliness and they could not create massive. Another reason is-Campaign in which join the people for avoiding pollution. Overall common persons are basic ladder for controlling pollution and manage climate while, Government also generate rules for the citizen.
Nowadays, Atmosphere issues are common in every
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country
such as
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pollution
and
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climate
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change
are
rapidly
grown up while, the
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government
has duties to take
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some
crucial decisions for the Intercontinental. There are
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many
hurdles of this matter
as well
as a number of remedies.

Pollution, meanwhile, introduced by local
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people
in
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many
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countries
.
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People
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who
Habit to throw a rubbish here and there.
For example
person
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who
always eat chocolate and wrapper of it throws away to the road and anywhere else
However
, In
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some
native land
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government
decided the penalty for throwing garbage and
also
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have to
declare find. It is a minor crime in
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many
states,
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but
still
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pollution
is increasing day by day. It is the responsibility of Management for awareness of
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people
's.
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It
is a matter of
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countries
development.
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So
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government
should create seminar to the
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people
's awareness.

Pollution is
directly
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affected
by the
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climate
. Drought, flood and rising sea level are common problems in every
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country
. Though
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people
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who responsible
for it, They have no
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idea
what type of mistake they have done.
However
, after the
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climate
humanity
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who
suffered from the
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climate
they have right to take funds from the insurance
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company
or
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government
.
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Moreover
money is the not
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only
way for developing of the nation,
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but
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countries
owner
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has to
create a major Low for reducing
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pollution
and try to control the
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climate
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change
.

The major solution of this problem are-
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People
should
be encouraged
by
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government
.
For example
, Education person can understand the value of
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cleanliness and
they could not create massive. Another reason is-Campaign in which
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join
the
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people
for avoiding pollution.

Overall
common persons are basic ladder for controlling
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pollution
and manage
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climate
while,
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Government
also
generate
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rules
for the citizen.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Environmental problems such as pollution and Climate variation are increasing nowadays. The government have taken some measurement at a global level but they only get few solution. why is it so? how can this problem be solved? v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
291 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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