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Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions. v.2

Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions. v. 2
Most urban cities have witnessed a rapid growth in terms of both development and population over the past decades and recently been faced with a disturbing trend of rise in the criminal activities amongst the youth. This essay will scrutinize the reasons behind this trend, like lack of job opportunities and substance abuse, and argue that increasing opportunities for education and work, as well as stricter laws can be the viable solutions. One of the major reasons is the lack of job opportunities. This is mainly because rapid development has given rise to overpopulation of the metropolitan cities due to migration from less developed areas. As a result, there is a lot of competition for jobs and hence more and more young people find themselves jobless. Thus, the frustration and lack of money often drives them to resort to unlawful activities. Another reason can be an increased indulgence in alcohol and drugs. As more young people are often living away from families and because of influence from media and internet, they are more vulnerable to substance abuse. Furthermore, in order to fetch money to fulfill their addictions, they often commit criminal offences. This problem needs to be addressed at the grass loot level by the concerned authorities. For instance, creating more job opportunities for the young population is an important aspect to curb this problem. In addition, youth can be made more employable by providing them technical skills and vocational training, this can be achieved by organizing special evening classes and sessions for adolescents and young adults. Another important step towards tackling this problem would be stricter laws around substance abuse. The police agencies need to have strict policies in place against drug dealers so that the youth does not have easy access. Furthermore, rehabilitation and awareness programs are required to deal with this issue. In conclusion, the rising youth crime can have detrimental effects on the development of the society. The major causes like increasing joblessness and substance abuse need to be appropriately addressed by providing the youth more education and job opportunities, and creating strict laws for drug abuse.
Most urban cities have witnessed a rapid growth in terms of both development and population over the past decades and recently
been faced
with a disturbing trend of rise in the criminal activities amongst the
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youth
. This essay will scrutinize the reasons behind this trend, like lack of
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job
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opportunities
and
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substance
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abuse
, and argue that increasing
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opportunities
for education and work,
as well
as stricter laws can be the viable solutions.

One of the major reasons is the lack of
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job
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opportunities
. This is
mainly
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because
rapid development has
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given
rise to overpopulation of the metropolitan cities due to migration from less developed areas.
As a result
, there is
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a lot of
competition for
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jobs
and
hence
more and more
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young
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people
find themselves jobless.
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, the frustration and lack of money
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often
drives them to resort to unlawful activities. Another reason can be an increased indulgence in alcohol and drugs. As more
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young
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people
are
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often
living away from families and
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because
of influence from media and internet, they are more vulnerable to
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substance
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abuse
.
Furthermore
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commit criminal
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at the grass loot level by the concerned authorities.
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, creating more
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job
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opportunities
for the
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young
population is an
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important
aspect to curb this problem.
In addition
,
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youth
can
be made
more employable by providing them technical
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skills
and vocational training, this can
be achieved
by organizing special evening classes and sessions for adolescents and
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young
adults. Another
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important
step towards tackling this problem would be stricter laws around
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substance
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abuse
. The police agencies need to have strict policies in place against drug dealers
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so
that the
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youth
does not have easy access.
Furthermore
, rehabilitation and awareness programs
are required
to deal with this issue.

In conclusion
, the rising
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youth
crime can have detrimental effects on the development of the society. The major causes like increasing joblessness and
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substance
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abuse
need to be
appropriately
addressed by providing the
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youth
more education and
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job
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opportunities
, and creating strict laws for drug
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abuse
.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes
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IELTS essay Levels of youth crime are increasing rapidly in most cities around the world. What are the reasons for this, and suggest some solutions. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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