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Environmental problem such as pollution and climate variations are increasing now days The government have taken measures at global level but they got only few solution v.2

Environmental problem such as pollution and climate variations are increasing now days The government have taken measures at global level but they got only few solution v. 2
our world climate is very fragile therefore we have to protect and maintain it as good as possible. Although governments are trying to do their best we still have high pollution in many levels plus climate fluctuations. Firstly, we should use resources reasonable and cost effectively. one of the biggest problem in our society is over consumption and production. Country witch belong to top of the economy list will use over 50% of world resources. we can learn from the studies that a big slice of the products we buy will end up in trash bin. For example, in Estonia over quarter of food people will buy end up in waste. it is a good example how we do not use resources in a good way. Solution for this problem would be smarter shopping habits. Secondly, ozone holes in the sky are getting bigger every year, therefore we should stop using equipment which will run on fuels, like cars. Amount of car in the world is rising every day. By manufacturing car we again use resources and pollut the environment. we can say that cars are one of the biggest problem in the world. In that case we should think better and more convenient ways to manufacture and maintain them. For example, bringing electric cars to mainstream will help to fight against air pollution. To conclude, environmental problems are rising every day like pollution and climate variations. In order to tackle that problem we have to change our ways how we spend resources.
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our
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world
climate is
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very
fragile
therefore
we
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have to
protect and maintain it as
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good
as possible. Although
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governments
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still
have high pollution in
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many
levels plus climate fluctuations.

Firstly
, we should
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use
resources reasonable and cost
effectively
.
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one
of the biggest
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problem
in our society is over consumption and production. Country witch belong to top of the economy list will
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use
over 50% of
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world
resources.
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we
can learn from the studies that a
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big
slice of the products we
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buy
will
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end
up in trash bin.
For example
, in Estonia over quarter of food
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people
will
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buy
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end
up in waste.
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it
is a
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good
example how we do not
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use
resources in a
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good
way. Solution for this
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problem
would be smarter shopping habits.

Secondly
, ozone holes in the sky are getting bigger every year,
therefore
we should
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stop
using equipment which will run on fuels, like
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cars
. Amount of
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car
in the
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world
is rising every day. By manufacturing
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car
we again
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use
resources and
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pollut
the environment.
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we
can say that
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cars
are one of the biggest
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problem
in the
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world
.
In that case
we should
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think
better and more convenient ways to manufacture and maintain them.
For example
, bringing electric
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cars
to mainstream will
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help
to fight against air pollution.

To conclude
, environmental
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problems
are rising every day like pollution and climate variations. In order to tackle that
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problem
we
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have to
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change
our ways how we spend resources.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Environmental problem such as pollution and climate variations are increasing now days The government have taken measures at global level but they got only few solution v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
253 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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