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As housing is a basic need for people government should provide free housing for everyone who cant t afford it To what extend do you agree or disagree v.2

As housing is a basic need for people government should provide free housing for everyone who cant t afford it v. 2
lifestyle has undergone dramatic changes over a couple of decades. Presently, due to modernization shelter has become a basic need of mankind. According to some people authority should provide houses to need folks without any cost. Here I am disagree with the given statement. To Begin with, in this contemporary era government had already provided their citizens with plethora of schemes such as Pension, unemployment wages and so on. to the needy person and therefore they do not toil to earn back and belly. Hence, peoples are used to enjoy these free facilities which are being provided by the administration. Moreover, by getting free houses from the authority the expectation of poor people will increase dramatically. Moving further, government should spend on serious problems instead of providing shelter to the public free of cost. Authority should spend on health disorder, poverty, unemployment and so on are spreading its roots in number of developing and developed nations. As a result, government fund have to be invested on the solution of these concerns for the betterment of people. On another hand, countries such as India, South Africa, Bangladesh poverty is at peak level, where people even do not have had wages to build their own house. So, authority should provide them house where they could try to make their future bright and the kids of poor family will get opportunity to get education. Hence, juvenile will burn mid night oil by having healthy environment of their own houses. To recapitulate, without having own shelter life would be like " eyes without vision" . Government should needy family but in some extend because there are ample of another issues which consumes plethora of money.
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lifestyle
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over a couple of decades.
Presently
, due to modernization shelter has become a basic need of mankind. According to
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people
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authority
should provide
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houses
to need folks without any cost. Here I am disagree with the
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statement.

To
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with, in this contemporary era
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government
had already provided their citizens with plethora of schemes such as Pension, unemployment wages and
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on. to the needy person and
therefore
they do not toil to earn back and belly.
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peoples
are
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used
to enjoy these free facilities which are
being provided
by the administration.
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houses
from the
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authority
the expectation of poor
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people
will increase
dramatically
.

Moving
further
,
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government
should spend on serious problems
instead
of providing shelter to the public free of cost.
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Authority
should spend on health disorder, poverty, unemployment and
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so
on are spreading its roots in number of developing and developed nations.
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,
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government
fund
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have to
be invested
on the solution of these concerns for the betterment of
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people
.

On another hand, countries such as India, South Africa, Bangladesh poverty is at peak level, where
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people
even do not have had wages to build their
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own
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house
.
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,
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authority
should provide them
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house
where they could try to
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make
their future bright and the kids of poor family will
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get
opportunity to
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get
education.
Hence
, juvenile will burn mid night oil by having healthy environment of their
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own
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houses
.

To recapitulate, without having
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own
shelter life would be like
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; eyes without
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family
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there are ample of another issues which consumes plethora of money.
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IELTS essay As housing is a basic need for people government should provide free housing for everyone who cant t afford it v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
281 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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