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Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v.5

Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 5
Environmental degradation is a worldwide issue because the political party in power is not taking giving punishments to offenders. This essay strongly disagrees with the aforementioned statement. This essay will first, discuss that the government has imposed huge fines on various factories and industries so that they do not pollute the environment, and further, outline that several means of public transports is built to discourage people to use their personal vehicle which releases harmful gases in the air. It is clear that the ministry has imposed many stringent penalties and laws on factories so that they do not release harmful gases in the air. This is to say, the industries are aware that if they will throw harmful chemical waste in water and land, then they will have to pay penalties to the law, so they ensure to undertake steps that do not have any harmful effects on the environment. As a result, the amount of pollution in the surrounding is reduced, thus protecting the habitat. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times showed more than 80 percent reduction in the amount of waste produces from manufacturing units because of huge fines imposed by the government. Apart from this, the political party in power launches various schemes and plans to discourage people from using their own cars and instead travel from public transportations and those who break these rules have to pay fines. In other words, people are motivated to travel from one place to another through metros and buses as this will not only reduce the amount of harmful combustible gas release from cars but will also reduce the traffic on roads. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times of India showed that the odd-even, that is in odd days cars with odd number will be used and on even dates cars having even number plates will be on the road, thus decreasing the nature's pollution by 60 percent. To conclude, In my opinion, I vehemently agree, that environment is punishing harsh for people involves in environmental degradation by imposing huge fines on factories and motivates people to use public transport rather than personal cars.
Environmental degradation is a worldwide issue
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because
the political party in power is not taking giving punishments to offenders. This essay
strongly
disagrees with the aforementioned statement. This essay will
first
, discuss that the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
has imposed huge
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
fines
on various factories and industries
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so
that they do not pollute the environment, and
further
, outline that several means of public transports
is built
to discourage
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people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
their personal vehicle which releases
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harmful
gases in the air.

It is
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clear
that the ministry has imposed
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many
stringent penalties and laws on factories
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so
that they do not release
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harmful
gases in the air. This is to say, the industries are aware that if they will throw
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harmful
chemical waste in water and land, then they will
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have to
pay penalties to the law,
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so
they ensure to undertake steps that do not have any
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harmful
effects on the environment.
As a result
, the amount of pollution in the surrounding is
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reduced
,
thus
protecting the habitat. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times
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showed
more than 80 percent reduction in the amount of waste produces from manufacturing units
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because
of huge
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fines
imposed by the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
.

Apart from this, the political party in power launches various schemes and plans to discourage
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people
from using their
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own
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cars
and
instead
travel from public transportations and those who break these
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rules
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have to
pay
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fines
.
In other words
,
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people
are motivated
to travel from one place to another through metros and buses as this will not
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only
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reduce
the amount of
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harmful
combustible gas release from
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cars
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but
will
also
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reduce
the traffic on roads. To elucidate, a recent study conducted by The Times of India
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showed
that the odd-even,
that is
in odd days
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cars
with odd number will be
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used
and on even dates
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cars
having even number plates will be on the road,
thus
decreasing the nature's pollution by 60 percent.

To conclude
, In my opinion, I
vehemently
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agree
, that environment is punishing harsh for
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people
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involves
in environmental degradation by imposing huge
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fines
on factories and motivates
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people
to
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use
public transport
rather
than personal
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cars
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
360 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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