Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

many people believe social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree? v.1

many people believe social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. v. 1
In the last decades, social networking has grown exponentially. Large amounts of people and institutions use these platforms to share content. These technological advances have led to better interconnected world, however, there are some negative aspects about it. In the following text positives and negative aspects of social networking will be discussed. Firstly, social networking is a great tool to keep individuals connected with the outside world. Indeed, social media allows people to keep in touch with their family and friends no matter how far they are. Moreover, now days everyone can have access to worldwide news, thanks to social media networks. In addition, authority abuses can be avoided when it becomes viral on social media. For example, in the United States of America, some police officers try to illegally arrest innocent people for no logical reasons. By publishing a video on social media about these situations, people and the law can take action to reduce the chances of this happening again. Despite all the positive aspects, it is unavoidable not to mention all the bad things social networking brings. To begin with, social media is a highly source of distraction and has a strong potential of being addictive. In fact, some people prefer being “online” rather than spending time with their friends and family. Also, it is important to mention the power social media gives to big institutions. The government and big companies have more control to influence peoples' choices. Eventually social media reduce individual's privacy. In conclusion, the positive impact of social media is more important than the negative. Every individual should learn to moderate their time spent on social media and protect their privacy.
In the last decades,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
networking has grown
exponentially
. Large amounts of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and institutions
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
these platforms to share content. These technological advances have led to better interconnected world,
however
, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
aspects about it. In the following text positives and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
aspects of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
networking will
be discussed
.

Firstly
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
networking is a great tool to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
individuals connected with the outside world.
Indeed
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allows
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
in touch with their family and friends no matter how far they are.
Moreover
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
days everyone can have access to worldwide news, thanks to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
networks.
In addition
, authority abuses can
be avoided
when it becomes viral on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
.
For example
, in the United States of America,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
police officers try to
illegally
arrest innocent
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
for no logical reasons. By publishing a video on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
about these situations,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
and the law can take action to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
the chances of this happening again.

Despite all the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
aspects, it is unavoidable not to mention all the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
things
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
networking brings. To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
is a
You used an adverb ('highly') instead of an adjective, or a noun ('source') instead of another adjective.
highly source
of distraction and has a strong potential of being addictive. In fact,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
prefer being “online”
rather
than spending time with their friends and family.
Also
, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
to mention the power
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
gives to
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
institutions. The
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
companies
have more control to influence peoples' choices.
Eventually
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
individual's privacy.

In conclusion
, the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
impact of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
is more
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
than the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
. Every individual should learn to moderate their time spent on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
social
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
media
and protect their privacy.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay many people believe social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
277 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Similar posts


Recent posts