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29. Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v.1

29. Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 1
It is a fact that environmental problems have become more severe for the world due to human daily life activities. Some people blame that environmental pollutions worldwide is due to lack of harsh punishments against offenders. I personally disagree with this view and believe that there are other more crucial methods that are applied to reduce environmental pollution. To begin with, firstly, there are more than 300 nations on the planet; therefore, it is impossible to carry out harsh punishments against international offenders. Besides, it will cost a tremendous amount of money to implant this strategy and the financial source is a major issue due to lack of international organization. Except punishing the nations or companies that generate environmental pollutions, there are other strategies to battle them. For example, developed countries should help developing ones to handle the environmental issues by providing consultation, knowledgeable experiences and profound strategies. Therefore, the developing countries are able to avoid or minimize the environmental problems when they are under the development of factories, facilities or infrastructures. In addition, promoting advanced techniques in processing and purifying toxic gases or waste water before released into the air or running into oceans worldwide, especially in the developing regions, will also contribute the protection of our environment. In addition, it is also necessary for people to adapt themselves to protect our planet as well. For instance, in communities, promoting recycling wastes during humans' daily activities, using public transport instead of driving private cars, switching to digital version books or electronic emails instead of paper version, reducing logging trees, and so on, all will help to reduce environmental pollutions and protect our natural habitat. In conclusion, it is our human beings' responsibility to protect our unique planet. Implanting hashing punishment to offenders is not a proper option to reduce the environmental pollutions due to the above reason; therefore, promoting proper strategies to reduce all kinds of pollutions during daily life activities in all economic sectors is one of the most important strategies to reduce the environmental issues.
It is a fact that
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environmental
problems have become more severe for the world
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due
to human daily life activities.
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Some
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people
blame that
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environmental
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pollutions
worldwide is
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due
to lack of harsh punishments against offenders. I
personally
disagree with this view and believe that there are other more crucial methods that
are applied
to
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reduce
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environmental
pollution.

To
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begin
with,
firstly
, there are more than 300 nations on the planet;
therefore
, it is impossible to carry out harsh punishments against international offenders.
Besides
, it will cost a tremendous amount of money to implant this
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strategy
and the financial source is a major issue
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due
to lack of international organization. Except punishing the nations or
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companies
that generate
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environmental
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pollutions
, there are other
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strategies
to battle them.
For example
,
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developed countries
should
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help
The verb 'help' is used with an infinitive: "to develop" or "develop".
developing
ones to handle the
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environmental
issues by providing consultation, knowledgeable experiences and profound
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strategies
.
Therefore
, the
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developing countries
are able to avoid or minimize the
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environmental
problems when they are under the development of factories, facilities or infrastructures.
In addition
, promoting advanced techniques in processing and purifying toxic gases or waste water
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before
released into the air or running into oceans worldwide,
especially
in the developing regions, will
also
contribute the protection of our environment.

In addition
, it is
also
necessary for
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people
to adapt themselves to protect our planet
as well
.
For instance
, in communities, promoting recycling wastes during humans' daily activities, using public transport
instead
of driving private cars, switching to digital version books or electronic emails
instead
of paper version, reducing logging trees, and
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so
on, all will
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help
to
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reduce
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environmental
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pollutions
and protect our natural habitat.

In conclusion
, it is our human beings' responsibility to protect our unique planet. Implanting hashing punishment to offenders is not a proper option to
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reduce
the
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environmental
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pollutions
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due
to the above reason;
therefore
, promoting proper
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strategies
to
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reduce
all kinds of
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pollutions
during daily life activities in all economic sectors is one of the most
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important
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strategies
to
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reduce
the
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environmental
issues.
20Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay 29. Environmental issues have always been an international problem because governments are not imposing harsh punishments against offenders. Support your answer with specific reasons and examples. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
338 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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