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Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones, or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion. v.8

Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones, or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion. v. 8
This essay is about to buy the different products to fulfil our dreams. In this essay we will argue about the both elements, to what extent we are agreed of disagreeing, and will share our opinion. In our society, many people are highly interested to have different devices to make them comfortable and satisfy them among the people around them. Hence, its highly demanded in lead class and trendy families in our culture. Moreover, to some extent its often needed to update our self with new models and different equipment to maintain our personality. Such as, wearing sunglasses, and buying new mobile and laptops is the quite famous devices now a day’s. Let me enlighten the reason, sometimes why it’s important in our society. Especially in corporate sector most of them are very conscious about them, and I believe when you will think a lot about unnecessary things, in the future, it will be listed in your fond” and then you will start buying many more things even though those are not important to you. For example, buying new models, cars, mobile phones, and gadgets. Furthermore, sometimes a small change is extremely important, to boost our morale and some energy in the life. So It would be good a addition in life to have some new and upgraded stuff for our appearance in public and places where we spend most of our time. Secondly, positive fond are always acceptable in society to main our decorum and lifestyle. The concept of particularly buying gadgets is to main the personality and some leisure in routine. In my opinion, I would say that’ it’s not bad to have different affections because every person is distinguished from each other and we can expect different interests from them. To conclude from this, everyone should spend a little time from their schedule to think about what they like, and a small amount of their wages for our fond's to be happy in life.
This essay is about to
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buy
the
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different
products to fulfil our dreams. In this essay we will argue about the both elements, to what extent we are
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agreed
of disagreeing, and will share our opinion.

In our society,
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many
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people
are
highly
interested to have
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different
devices to
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make
them comfortable and satisfy them among the
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people
around them.
Hence
, its
highly
demanded in lead
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class
and trendy families in our culture.
Moreover
, to
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some
extent its
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often
needed to update our self with
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new
models and
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different
equipment to maintain our personality. Such as, wearing sunglasses, and
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buying
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
new
mobile and laptops is the quite
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famous
devices
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now
a day’s.
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Let
me enlighten the reason,
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sometimes
why it’s
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important
in our society.
Especially
in corporate sector most of them are
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very
conscious about them, and I believe when you will
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think
a lot about unnecessary things, in the future, it will
be listed
in your fond” and then you will
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start
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buying
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many
more things
even though
those are not
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important
to you.
For example
,
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buying
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new
models, cars, mobile phones, and gadgets.

Furthermore
,
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sometimes
a
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small
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change
is
extremely
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important
, to boost our morale and
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some
energy in the life.
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So
It would be
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good
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a
addition in life to have
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some
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new
and upgraded stuff for our appearance in public and places where we spend most of our time.
Secondly
,
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positive
fond are always acceptable in society to main our decorum and lifestyle. The concept of
particularly
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buying
gadgets is to main the personality and
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some
leisure in routine.

In my opinion, I would say that’ it’s not
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bad
to have
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different
affections
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because
every person
is distinguished
from each
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other and
we can
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expect
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different
interests from them.
To conclude
from this, everyone should spend a
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little
time from their schedule to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
about what they like, and a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
amount of their wages for our fond's to be happy in life.
8.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people are fond of buying new gadgets, phones, or laptops. Is this a good or bad thing? Discuss your opinion. v. 8

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
8.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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