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Education plays a vital role in the development of a country or a society. If the high school will be built in my community I will definitely welcome it. I have many reasons to support it but I will describe a few. First of all, because of "c v.2

Education plays a vital role in the development of a country or a society. If the high school will be built in my community I will definitely welcome it. I have many reasons to support it but I will describe a few. First of all, because of "c v. 2
Education plays a vital role in the development of a country or a society. If the high school will be built in my community I will definitely welcome it. I have many reasons to support it but I will describe a few. First of all, because of " convenient and affordability" of the students, know many students in my area, who have to travel very far to attend high school. Some of them go by bus and the bus service is very costly. Various family can bear teh cost, but there are a few who can not. If a high school will be in society, it will be very money-saving plan. Beside this, it will make more convenient for the students who get exhausted by traveling so far. For example, one or my neighbour' s son was feeling very tired and stressed, after traveling one hour from school. I talked to him, he wanted to give up for the same reason. Hence, a new high school will a new hope for them. Everyone will be very pleased and happy to hear this. Furthermore, It will promote girl education in my community. In India there are many villages, which doent has high school and I know many parents, who somehow send their boys to attend high school but they feel unsecured to send their daughters to high school. They believe that sending daughetrs to such a far place is not a good culture. Hence if my community have higher school service it will be beneficial for the girls, who wanted to study but can' t do it just because of the unavailability of school. I personally believe that Girls education is very crucial for society' s development. If they will not study enough then how will they teach their kids. A well education mother can raise a well-educated child. one of famous person Nepolean Bonapart has been said that" give me a good mother I will give you good nation" . So girls education is very co-related to the country' s progress. Therefore I will strongly support the high school plan. In conclusion, I feel that " students convenience" and girls education promotion are important factors to be considered for the success of a country in any field. So I will really welcome the idea about high school building plan for the sake of my country' s development.
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plays a vital role in the development of a
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country
or a society.
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school
will
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in my community I will definitely welcome it. I have
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reasons to support it
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a few.

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affordability&quot
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students
, know
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many
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students
in my area,
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who
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have to
travel
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far to attend
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school
.
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of them go by bus and the bus service is
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very
costly. Various family can bear
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cost,
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there are a few
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can not. If a
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high
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school
will be in society, it will be
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very
money-saving plan. Beside this, it will
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make
more convenient for the
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students
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who
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get
exhausted by traveling
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far.
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#039; s son was feeling
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tired and
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, after traveling one hour from
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school
. I talked to him, he wanted to give up for the same reason.
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, a new
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high
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school
will a new hope for them. Everyone will be
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very
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pleased
and happy to hear this.

Furthermore
, It will promote
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girl
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education
in my community. In India there are
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many
villages, which
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doent
has
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high
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school
and I know
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parents,
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who
somehow
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send
their boys to attend
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high
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school
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but
they feel unsecured to
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send
their daughters to
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high
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school
. They believe that sending
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daughetrs
to such a far place is not a
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good
culture.
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Hence
if my community have higher
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school
service it will be beneficial for the
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girls
,
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who
wanted to study
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of the unavailability of
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. I
personally
believe that
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Girls
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education
is
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crucial for
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society&
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will not study
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enough
then how will they teach their kids. A well
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education
mother can raise a well-educated child.
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of
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person
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good
mother I will give you
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good
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nation&quot
;
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.
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So
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girls
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education
is
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very
co-related to the
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country&
#039; s progress.
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Therefore
I will
strongly
support the
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high
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school
plan.

In conclusion
, I feel that
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;
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students
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convenience&quot
; and
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girls
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education
promotion are
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important
factors to
be considered
for the success of a
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country
in any field.
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So
I will
really
welcome the
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idea
about
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high
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school
building plan for the sake of my
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country&
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8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
45Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Education plays a vital role in the development of a country or a society. If the high school will be built in my community I will definitely welcome it. I have many reasons to support it but I will describe a few. First of all, because of "c v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
397 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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