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Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. v.4

Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. v. 4
Some people believe that a government should provide free education and medication for the residents. To a certain point, I would agree with the idea, but I also believe that everybody should be responsible for his own education and health condition. For a number of reasons, some believe that education and healthcare should be funded by the government. To begin with, most of the people fulfil their tax obligation, and they should definitely get some benefits from the government in the form of free medication and education for their children. It is a fact that education is an essential factor for the development of a country. By providing free education to the residents it is hoped that more skilled and educated workers would be created. These potential workers will definitely boost the country's economic sectors. A group of people, however, disagree with the idea of providing free health service and education to the public. One of the reasons is that free medical service makes some people irresponsible of their health condition. It is believed that expensive health care would force people to follow a strict life style and quit smoking and drinking. They also opine that private fund for education makes schooling system more effective as guardians are more conscious of taking care of their children's learning. For instance, many private schools are doing better in developing countries than the state funded schools and parents active involvement made the difference. To a certain extent, I support that a government should provide free education and medication to people. But I also believe that people should also be responsible for their own life.
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benefits from the
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medication and
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education
for their children. It is a fact that
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education
is an essential factor for the development of a country. By providing
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free
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education
to the residents it
is hoped
that more skilled and educated workers would
be created
. These potential workers will definitely boost the country's economic sectors.

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however
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free
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health
service and
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education
to the public. One of the reasons is that
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medical service
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some
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irresponsible of their
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condition. It
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care would force
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people
to follow a strict life style and quit smoking and drinking. They
also
opine that private fund for
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education
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makes
schooling system more effective as guardians are more conscious of taking care of their children's learning.
For instance
,
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many
private schools are doing better in
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developing countries
than the state funded schools and parents active involvement made the difference.

To a certain extent, I support that a
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government
should provide
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free
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education
and medication to
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people
.
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also
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that
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should
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be responsible for their
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own
life.
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IELTS essay Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
271 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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