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Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. v.3

Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. v. 3
Sample” survey of India in 2015, people had to spend more than one-third of their wages on health care and schooling. In a developing country, it is quite hard for citizens to manage it all by their own, especially since education and treatment are getting expensive these days. These should be free as poor people cannot afford the higher education and good health care system. Moreover, if the government provides free education, the literacy rate will surely increase and the citizens would contribute far better to the overall development of the country. So, in this way, the economy of that country will flourish day by day. In addition, another recent survey in India shows that almost 32% people die every year without proper treatment because they are poor. Furthermore, a healthy nation is the base of an industrial nation and it is a government's responsibility to make the proper medical treatment and service available for all. In conclusion, if education and medical facility are provided by the government for free to its citizens, then a country will get more benefits from it. Education and healthy life are two basic needs of every citizen and a government is in fact, formed to make sure no citizen is deprived of his basic needs.
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had to spend more than one-third of their wages on health care and schooling. In a developing
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, it is quite
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hard
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citizens
to manage it all by their
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own
,
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since
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education
and treatment are getting expensive these days. These should be free as poor
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people
cannot afford the higher
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education
and
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good
health care system.
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, if the
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government
provides free
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education
, the literacy rate will
surely
increase and the
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citizens
would contribute far better to the
overall
development of the
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country
.
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So
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country
will flourish day by day.

In addition
, another recent survey in India
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shows
that almost 32%
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people
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die
every year without proper treatment
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because
they are poor.
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, a healthy nation is the base of an industrial nation and it is a
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government
's responsibility to
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make
the proper medical treatment and service available for all.

In conclusion
, if
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education
and medical facility
are provided
by the
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government
for free to its
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citizens
, then a
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will
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get
more benefits from it.
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Education
and healthy life are two basic needs of every
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citizen
and a
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government
is in fact, formed to
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make
sure no
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citizen
is deprived
of his basic needs.
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IELTS essay Education and health care should be funded by the government and free for everyone. v. 3

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
211 words
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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