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Educaiton should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of educaiton, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion? v.1

Educaiton should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of educaiton, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. v. 1
Fees for higher education are expensive and not affordable for everyone so according to some university education should be free for all people regardless of their background. In my opinion. I agree that university education ought to be free as it will greatly benefit both individuals and society. A good reason to abolish university fees is that it gives people whether they are rich or poor equal rights. At present, student from a poor background are prevented from entering university because they are unable to pay the fees. This excludes a large proportion of society and is discriminatory which can be avoided by getting rid of tuition fees. Another point to consider is that having no fees at university means that students will no longer have to work at the same time as studying to cover their cost. For example, around three quarters of all students in the UK have to work either full-time or part-time while studying to pay their fees. Free higher education should, therefore, produce better results as students will be able to afford to apply themselves to their studies exclusively. Finally, free university education will benefit society in the long run, for the simple reason that it will open up higher education to a wider section of the population. This will result in increasing the number of educated people. In other words, having a greater resource of skilled and knowledgeable professionals will bring greater rewards to society as a whole. Moreover, it can bring more economic advantages to a country that shows itself to be prosperous and leading in various fields. In conclusion, free university education is a must for any country that values equal rights and one that wished to advance. That cost of free education will be recouped many times by the benefits it brings.
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should be
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free
for all
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people
regardless of their background. In my opinion. I
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agree
that
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university
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ought to be
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free
as it will
greatly
benefit both individuals and society.

A
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good
reason to abolish
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university
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fees
is that it gives
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people
whether they are rich or poor equal rights. At present,
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student
from a poor background are
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prevented
from entering
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university
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because
they are unable to pay the
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fees
. This excludes a large proportion of society and is discriminatory which can
be avoided
by getting rid of tuition fees.

Another point to consider is that having no
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fees
at
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university
means that
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students
will no longer
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have to
work at the same time as studying to cover their cost.
For example
, around three quarters of all
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students
in the UK
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
work either full-time or part-time while studying to pay their
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fees
.
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Free
higher
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education
should,
therefore
, produce better results as
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students
will be able to afford to apply themselves to their studies exclusively.

Finally
,
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free
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university
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education
will benefit society in the long run, for the simple reason that it will open up higher
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education
to a wider section of the population. This will result in increasing the number of educated
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
.
In other words
, having a greater resource of skilled and knowledgeable professionals will bring greater rewards to society as a whole.
Moreover
, it can bring more economic advantages to a country that
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
shows
itself to be prosperous and leading in various fields.

In conclusion
,
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free
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university
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education
is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
for any country that values equal rights and one that wished to advance. That cost of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
free
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education
will
be recouped
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
times by the benefits it brings.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0Mistakes

IELTS essay Educaiton should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of educaiton, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. v. 1

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
301 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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