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Economic progress is one factor that is being considered to measure the success of a country, but there are other factors that should be considered when measuring the success of a country. What other factors do you think should be v. 1

Nowadays for a fraction of the population, it is quite common to believe people visiting other countries should follow the behaviours and culture of the local citizens, while others believe this is not mandatory given hosts should be accepting cultural diversity. I will be discussing both and explain why I believe the later is the one that should be adopted as the norm. In recent years we've been watching a growing trend of increasing parts of the society which shows a negative view towards those who act differently compared to the social standards of living, working and communicating. One of the reasons for that increase is linked to the rising population of immigrants in developed countries, leading to higher contrasts between native people and foreign residents. For example, a recent research showed 1/4 of North Americans believe immigrants are affecting the way children act and behave. If parents start to realize their children are not following the social standards they expect, they will try to develop barriers to block access to newcomers and their families, resulting in an increased common view against those who do not fit the local culture. On the other hand, globalization and the internet have exposed the world to a huge variety of different cultures. As a result, children are now raised watching movies, tv shows and documentaries from all continents, spreading a common sense of a universal society, connected with all sorts of social networks and traditional media. That leads to a new generation of citizens which are widely opened to new experiences and languages, and therefore more accepting to host and embrace visitors in a more welcoming way. Furthermore, if peoples from different countries can better integrate, they will also improve the likelihood of better trades and exchange of knowledge, leading to mutual development for both parties. Globalization has more than ever exposed the contrasts between native people and those who are visiting new countries and places, which can result on increased hate and lack of integration between individuals, but also can provide the opportunity for acquiring new knowledge and broaden their views. I believe society should move forward to integrate different cultures to achieve the goal of a global community.

IELTS essay Economic progress is one factor that is being considered to measure the success of a country, but there are other factors that should be considered when measuring the success of a country. Do you agree or disagree? What other factors do you think should be v.1

Nowadays for a fraction of the population, it is quite common to believe
people
visiting other countries
should
follow the
behaviours
and culture of the local citizens, while others believe this is not mandatory
given
hosts
should
be accepting cultural diversity. I will be discussing both and
explain
why I believe the
later
is the one that
should
be adopted
as the norm. In recent years we've been watching a growing trend of increasing parts of the society which
shows
a
negative
view towards those who act
differently
compared to the social standards of living, working and communicating. One of the reasons for that increase
is linked
to the rising population of immigrants in
developed countries
, leading to higher contrasts between native
people
and foreign residents.
For example
, a recent research
showed
1/4 of North Americans believe immigrants are affecting the way children act and behave. If parents
start
to realize their children are not following the social standards they
expect
, they will try to develop barriers to block access to newcomers and their families, resulting in an increased common view against those who do not fit the local culture.
On the other hand
, globalization and the internet have exposed the world to a huge variety of
different
cultures.
As a result
, children are
now
raised watching movies,
tv
shows
and documentaries from all continents, spreading a common sense of a universal society, connected with all sorts of social networks and traditional media. That leads to a new generation of citizens which are
widely
opened to new experiences and languages, and
therefore
more accepting to host and embrace visitors in a more welcoming way.
Furthermore
, if peoples from
different
countries can better integrate, they will
also
improve
the likelihood of better trades and exchange of knowledge, leading to mutual development for both parties. Globalization has more than ever exposed the contrasts between native
people
and those who are visiting new countries and places, which can result on increased hate and lack of integration between individuals,
but
also
can provide the opportunity for acquiring new knowledge and broaden their views. I believe society
should
move
forward to integrate
different
cultures to achieve the goal of a global community.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
54Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
4 paragraphs
367 words
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