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Eating is a balance diet is a most important factor for healthy life. To what extent do you agree or disgree. v.2

Eating is a balance diet is a most important factor for healthy life. v. 2
It is sometimes thought that consuming food that contains all essential nutrients gurantee healthy life. While other are of the opinion the there are many other factors such as managing stress and adequate sleep. In my opinion, balance diet certainly enhances healthy life but there are some other important factors that should be considered. A balance diet is one that provides an adequate intake of essentials energy and nutrients that individual needs for healthy growth. Human needs proportion of minerals, carbonhydrates, proteins, iron, water and calcuim and lack of this can result to malnutrition. A research carried in Uk has shown that lack of essential nutrient in the body can result to some specific diseases such as rickets, tetany, goiter and iron deficiency anemia to mention few. In order to avoid the unhealthy situation, hence it necessary to eat a good diet. However, this can not be consider has only factor that guarantee healthy life. Managing stress is also an important key component of healthy life. If this is not properly manage it can result to high blood pressure, health issues, obesity and diabetics. Furthermore not having adequate sleep can have long effects on human body. Scientists has prove that when an individual deprive oneself from adequate sleep can lead to insomia, loss of weight and mental illness. In conclusion, although one of the primary factors to healthy life is consuming balance nutrition but there are other factors such as stress managment and adequate sleep is also paramount.
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that consuming food that contains all essential nutrients
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gurantee
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healthy
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life
. While
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other
are of the opinion the there are
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many
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other
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factors
such as managing
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stress
and
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adequate
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sleep
. In my opinion, balance diet
certainly
enhances
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healthy
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life
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but
there are
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some
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other
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important
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factors
that should
be considered
.

A balance diet is one that provides an
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adequate
intake of essentials energy and nutrients that individual needs for
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healthy
growth. Human needs proportion of minerals,
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carbonhydrates
, proteins, iron, water and
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calcuim
and lack of this can result to malnutrition.
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carried in
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Uk
has shown that lack of essential nutrient in the body can result to
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some
specific diseases such as rickets,
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tetany
, goiter and iron deficiency anemia to mention few. In order to avoid the unhealthy situation,
hence
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it
necessary to eat a
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good
diet.

However
, this can not be
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consider
has
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only
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factor
that guarantee
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healthy
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life
. Managing
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stress
is
also
an
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important
key component of
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healthy
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life
. If this is not
properly
manage it can result to high blood pressure, health issues, obesity and diabetics.
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not having
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adequate
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sleep
can
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have


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long
effects on human body.
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prove
that when an individual
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deprive oneself from
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adequate
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sleep
can lead to
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insomia
, loss of weight and mental illness.

In conclusion
, although one of the primary
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factors
to
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healthy
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life
is consuming balance nutrition
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but
there are
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other
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factors
such as
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stress
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managment
and
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adequate
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sleep
is
also
paramount.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
29Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
17Mistakes

IELTS essay Eating is a balance diet is a most important factor for healthy life. v. 2

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
248 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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