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Due to effects of globalisation, the cultures of some countries are influenced by others. Some people think this is a natural process. Others think this is a threat to cultural identity. What is your opinion about this? v.1

Due to effects of globalisation, the cultures of some countries are influenced by others. Some people think this is a natural process. Others think this is a threat to cultural identity. What is your opinion about this? v. 1
Globalisation is sweeping all the differences and boundaries among nations. The buzzword globalisation refers to freeing up of markets, free flow of goods and information and as a result, the traditional barriers among nations are gradually breaking down and the world is becoming closer in terms of cultural and economic relations. So as a natural process, the culture of different countries are blending together and a country is adopting foreign cultures faster than ever. In recent years some countries are experiencing rapid cultural changes and the culture of a dominating country is being adopted by the people of other countries. For instance, due to the spread of Indian TV channels and their Bombay-centric flamboyant Hindi cultures, many SAARC countries are on the verge of losing their century-old cultural uniqueness. Interestingly, Indian culture is also being influenced by more dominating Hollywood. In the age of globalisation, countries are seeking greater cooperation and the spirit is a greater flow of commodities, information and people across the borders of different countries. Mass media and technology have played an even greater role in promoting the norm of globalisation and people these days are aware of the cultural presence of other countries. The tourist influx in different countries is creating a mix cultural global village where no country is unique, rather they all have a mixed-culture. Some people treat this as a natural process while others take it as a threat to their own cultural identity. I personally believe that cultures are dynamic and living phenomena. Culture, what we know today, was different in the past and that is why we should not be too much wary of changes. Even before globalisation swept in, we started celebrating the 31st December and the Valentine’s Day, which is completely foreign to our culture. This is the era of free information exchange and if we stop international cooperation for the sake of our cultural identity, our progress would stop overnight. In conclusion, the free trade and global market is such a powerful concept that it cannot be stopped anymore. Keeping the window of progress is better than keeping them close even if this means inheriting foreign cultures.
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Globalisation
is sweeping all the differences and boundaries among nations. The buzzword
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globalisation
refers to freeing up of markets, free flow of
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goods
and information and
as a result
, the traditional barriers among nations are
gradually
breaking down and the world is becoming closer in terms of
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cultural
and economic relations.
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So
as a natural process, the
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culture
of
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different
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countries
are blending together and a
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country
is adopting foreign
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cultures
faster than ever.

In recent years
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some
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countries
are experiencing rapid
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changes
and the
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culture
of a dominating
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country
is
being adopted
by the
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people
of other
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countries
.
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, due to the spread of Indian TV channels and their Bombay-centric flamboyant Hindi
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cultures
,
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SAARC
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are on the verge of losing their century-
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uniqueness.
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, Indian
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is
also
being influenced
by more dominating Hollywood.

In the age of
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globalisation
,
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countries
are seeking greater cooperation and the spirit is a greater flow of commodities, information and
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people
across the borders of
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different
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countries
. Mass media and technology have played an even greater role in promoting the norm of
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globalisation
and
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people
these days are aware of the
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cultural
presence of other
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countries
. The tourist influx in
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different
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countries
is creating a mix
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cultural
global village where no
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country
is unique,
rather
they all have a mixed-culture.

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Some
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people
treat this as a natural process while others take it as a threat to their
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own
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identity. I
personally
believe that
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cultures
are dynamic and living phenomena.
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, what we know
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, was
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in the past and
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why we should not be too much wary of
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changes
. Even
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before
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globalisation
swept in, we
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started
celebrating the 31st December and the Valentine’s Day, which is completely foreign to our
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culture
. This is the era of free information exchange and if we
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stop
international cooperation for the sake of our
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cultural
identity, our progress would
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stop
overnight.

In conclusion
, the free trade and global market is such a powerful concept that it cannot be
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stopped
anymore. Keeping the window of progress is better than keeping them close even if this means inheriting foreign
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cultures
.
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IELTS essay Due to effects of globalisation, the cultures of some countries are influenced by others. Some people think this is a natural process. Others think this is a threat to cultural identity. What is your opinion about this? v. 1

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