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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer v. 268 v.24

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer v. 268 v. 24
Throughout the world, one of the parents’ concerns is that their children are being raised creatively and to achieve the creativity instead of reading they use visual and intellectual games. These delightful actions have many beneficial achievements and contributes to the children will be more skills. I am a strong advocate of this approach, and I try to point out some of these benefits. On the one hand, according to official statistics myriad of children do not take pleasure from reading and continuing the trend will be considered a compulsion for them and the children will probably resist it. Learning through reading will be raised kids mono dimensional and creates lots of problems. For example, imagine a seller specializing in his field can’t be successful, on the ground that he has not learned social skills as well. On the other hand, the best thing that parents can do for their offspring is to flourish their kids’ talents. The best way to fulfil this important is teaching kids through enjoyable activities. By this method fathers and mothers can discover their child’s genius and grow it. This attitude brings about the kids learn many skills at an early age simultaneously. For instance, my three-year old daughter has learned many skills by this technique and notwithstanding her young age, furthermore her native language, she has learned many concepts such as numbers, characters, shapes, and colours in English. In conclusion, as I mentioned above, teaching by interest is more sufficient then reading for kids. I highly recommended as a father, don’t restrict your babies just by reading.
Throughout the world, one of the parents’ concerns is that their
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children
are
being raised
creatively
and to achieve the creativity
instead
of
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reading
they
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use
visual and intellectual games. These delightful actions have
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many
beneficial achievements and contributes to the
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children
will be more
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skills
. I am a strong advocate of this approach, and I try to point out
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some
of these benefits.

On the one hand, according to official statistics myriad of
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children
do not take pleasure from
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reading
and continuing the trend will
be considered
a compulsion for them and the
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children
will
probably
resist it. Learning through
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reading
will
be raised
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kids
mono dimensional and creates lots of problems.
For example
, imagine a seller specializing in his field can’t be successful, on the ground that he has not learned social
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skills
as well
.

On the other hand
, the best thing that parents can do for their offspring is to flourish their
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kids’
talents. The best way to fulfil this
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important
is teaching
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kids
through enjoyable activities. By this method fathers and mothers can discover their child’s genius and grow it. This attitude brings about the
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kids
learn
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many
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skills
at an early age
simultaneously
.
For instance
, my three-year
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old
daughter has learned
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many
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skills
by this technique and notwithstanding her young age,
furthermore
her native language, she has learned
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many
concepts such as numbers, characters, shapes, and
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colours
in English.

In conclusion
, as I mentioned above, teaching by interest is more sufficient
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then
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reading
for
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kids
. I
highly
recommended as a father, don’t restrict your babies
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just
by
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reading
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer v. 268 v. 24

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
263 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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