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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer. v. 258 v.18

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer. v. 258 v. 18
In recent decade the world has witnessed a lot of change in the field of education. Many believe that teaching youngster with motivational, interesting, and engaging games can be more fruitful and lead to the twofold development in children, than what he can gain at school through normal education methodology. In this essay, I strongly opine to the above context of including games, songs and drawing in learning is better than normal reading. Undoubtedly, students learn better when taught using engaging activity. Obviously, these activities can include games, sing-along songs, and forms of art and craft. For instance, many Indian villages still follow traditional games to teach the basic livelihood to children. Consequently, these students behave well in society compare to other youngsters. Also, students hold on to these lessons longer than the regular lesson which was taught using routine teaching techniques. Additionally, schools and parents can arrange field trips to enhance the learning experience of learners. In spite of being outdoors away from the comfort of the classroom, students tend to give their 100 percent involvement. Which will definitely improve the quality of education system which we have followed over decades now. Along with this, I would also like to cite that this method can help children develop and boost their brain. To conclude, it is always better for students to learn through griping and joyous activity, rather than just plain old reading technique. So the inclusion of field trips and modified teaching techniques can benefit the new generation learning.
In recent decade the world has witnessed
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a lot of
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change
in the field of education.
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Many
believe that teaching youngster with motivational, interesting, and engaging
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games
can be more fruitful and lead to the twofold development in children, than what he can gain at school through normal education methodology. In this essay, I
strongly
opine to the above context of including
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
, songs and drawing in learning is better than normal reading.

Undoubtedly
,
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students
learn better when taught using engaging activity.
Obviously
, these activities can include
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
, sing-along songs, and forms of art and craft.
For instance
,
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many
Indian villages
still
follow traditional
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
games
to teach the basic livelihood to children.
Consequently
, these
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students
behave well in society compare to other youngsters.
Also
,
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students
hold on to these lessons longer than the regular lesson which
was taught
using routine teaching techniques.

Additionally
, schools and parents can arrange field trips to enhance the learning experience of learners.
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In spite of
being outdoors away from the comfort of the classroom,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
tend to give their 100 percent involvement. Which will definitely
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improve
the quality of education system which we have followed over decades
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now
. Along with this, I would
also
like to cite that this method can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
children develop and boost their brain.

To conclude
, it is always better for
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students
to learn through griping and joyous activity,
rather
than
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just
plain
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old
reading technique.
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So
the inclusion of field trips and modified teaching techniques can benefit the new generation learning.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer. v. 258 v. 18

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
251 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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