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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extent do you agree? Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer. v.13

Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer. v. 13
Reading plays a pivotal role in the baby's overall development. In this world, some people believe that only online reading materials should be used for a youngster to learn to read. On the other hand, some recommend the use of printed materials. I strongly agree with the people who are in support of the printed resources. In this essay, I shall explain both sides of the arguments. As we know, the internet is growing fast and have a vast set of resources that allows us to use these resources in the education sector. In such cases, Online reading materials have become a popular choice for reading and people recommend these resources to be used for an adolescent to learn to read. As a result, a toddler can learn with the help of various infographics. Moreover, various resources can be accessed within seconds which is not possible in case of the printed documents. On the contrary, some people advise the use of printed material. They suggest that printed material helps the child to learn to read easily because a child can focus on one thing. For example, a child has a physical copy on that he or she can highlight the text as well. In addition to that, print material is easy to carry. Whereas in the case of online material internet connectivity is required. To put this in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that online material and printed materials have both advantages and disadvantages, but as a result printed material has an edge over the online material in case of an infant to learn to read.
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Reading
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overall
development. In this world,
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some
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people
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online
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reading
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materials
should be
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used
for a youngster to
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learn
to
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read
.
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,
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recommend the
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of
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printed
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materials
. I
strongly
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agree
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people
who are in support of the
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printed
resources. In this essay, I shall
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explain
both sides of the arguments.

As we know, the internet is growing
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fast
and have a vast set of resources that
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allows
us to
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use
these resources in the education sector. In such cases,
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Online
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reading
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materials
have become a popular choice for
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reading
and
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people
recommend these resources to be
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used
for an adolescent to
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learn
to
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read
.
As a result
, a toddler can
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learn
with the
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help
of various infographics.
Moreover
, various resources can
be accessed
within seconds which is not possible in case of the
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printed
documents.

On the contrary
,
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some
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people
advise the
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printed
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. They suggest that
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printed
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material
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helps
the child to
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learn
to
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read
easily
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because
a child can focus on one thing.
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, a child has a physical copy on that he or she can highlight the text
as well
.
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to that, print
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material
is easy to carry.
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Whereas
in the case of
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online
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material
internet connectivity
is required
.

To put this in a nutshell, I pen down, saying that
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online
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material
and
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printed
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materials
have both advantages and disadvantages,
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but
as a result
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printed
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material
has an edge over the
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online
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material
in case of an infant to
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learn
to
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read
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. Use reasons and specific examples to explain your answer. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
267 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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