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You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not bu v.1

You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not bu v. 1
We cannot deny that the family is an important part for children. Although there are some advantages pointing out that children should spend almost their break moment with their families, I think that spending an excessive date has unimportant or even led to some long-term consequences. On the one hand, there are several reasons why children should spend much present to stay with their parents. Firstly, it helps the children to learn about their family culture and discipline. In fact, as parents, have a great influence on children’s lifestyles, they will educate children about family tradition and proper behaviour. Secondly, children will not come under the influence of outsiders and will not learn bad habits from others people. For instance, many Vietnamese students nowadays tend to behave because they witness negative actions of others and learn from them. On the other hand, if children should spend point exclusively with the family, this will result in some negative impacts. First, kids can lose the chance to go out discover more new things around them. For example, if children only stay at home with their parents, this will limit their knowledge about the world outside. Second, by just using their generation with their family, children will not able to make and exposure to more new friends and people. In order words, this will prevent children from having relationship and learning some life skills such as communication skills, social skills, etc. In conclusion, while the idea that children should spend all of their past with their family has some benefits, I would believe that the opinion children should use their second outside is much better.
We cannot deny that the
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family
is an
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important
part for
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children
. Although there are
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some
advantages pointing out that
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children
should
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spend
almost their break moment with their
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families
, I
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think
that spending an excessive date has unimportant or even led to
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some
long-term consequences.

On the one hand, there are several reasons why
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children
should
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spend
much present to stay with their parents.
Firstly
, it
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helps
the
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children
to learn about their
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family
culture and discipline. In fact, as parents, have a great influence on
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children’s
lifestyles, they will educate
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children
about
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family
tradition and proper
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behaviour
.
Secondly
,
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children
will not
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come
under the influence of outsiders and will not learn
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bad
habits from others
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people
.
For instance
,
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many
Vietnamese students nowadays tend to behave
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because
they witness
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negative
actions of others and learn from them.

On the other hand
, if
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children
should
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spend
point exclusively with the
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family
, this will result in
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some
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negative
impacts.
First
, kids can lose the chance to go out discover more new things around them.
For example
, if
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children
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only
stay at home with their parents, this will limit their knowledge about the world outside. Second, by
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just
using their generation with their
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family
,
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children
will not able to
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make
and exposure to more new friends and
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people
. In order words, this will
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prevent
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children
from having relationship and learning
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some
life
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skills
such as communication
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skills
, social
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skills
, etc.

In conclusion
, while the
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idea
that
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children
should
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spend
all of their past with their
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family
has
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some
benefits, I would believe that the opinion
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children
should
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use
their second outside is much better.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay You have just received a credit card statement from your bank. The statement lists a number of expensive purchases that you are sure you did not make. Write a letter to the bank manager. In the letter: • Introduce yourself. • Explain that you did not bu v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
272 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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