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Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v.1

Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v. 1
Gasoline is sometimes referred to as black gold. Although, by hearing the price, the fuel might not be in the purchasing power of an average citizen, resulting in lower consumption. However, I believe that it will not solve growing environmental and mobility crises of our specie. Firstly, soaring oil prices will make the shipment expensive. It will also burden the public transportation for economic reasons. These upheavals might result in time wastage, diseases and social unrest and create more destruction that the intended construction it was supposed to do. So by lowering the price of petrol, we can make transit cheaper, have more vehicles per capita and make mobility more reliable. To decrease the environmental footprint, we can encourage the masses to use the common mode of travel rather than the personal one. So in this way, we can kill two birds with one stone I. E reduce fare prices and lower pollution. Secondly, due to the indispensability of petroleum products in the modern economy, it would be very difficult for us to invest in the new technologies, with higher prices, which emit less waste material into the atmosphere because increasing fuel costs may render it useless in terms of operational cost. Hence impact on the environment may increase prices due to shoot up. So if fuel prices plummet, it will encourage us to find new sustainable alternate solutions. In conclusion, I believe that the solution to the climate and shipment crisis does not lie in excluding the large portion of the masses from a thing upon which they highly depend, rather it lies in the inclusion of all the stakeholders which can be best achieved by decreasing the prices of oil and exploring sustainable solutions to mitigate it.
Gasoline is
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sometimes
referred to as black gold. Although, by hearing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
, the fuel might not be in the purchasing power of an average citizen, resulting in lower consumption.
However
, I believe that it will not solve growing environmental and mobility crises of our specie.

Firstly
, soaring oil
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the shipment expensive. It will
also
burden the public transportation for economic reasons. These upheavals might result in time wastage, diseases and social unrest and create more destruction that the intended construction it
was supposed
to do.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
by lowering the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
price
of petrol, we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
transit cheaper, have more vehicles per capita and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
mobility more reliable. To decrease the environmental footprint, we can encourage the masses to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
the common mode of travel
rather
than the personal one.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
in this way, we can kill two birds with one stone I. E
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduce
fare
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
and lower pollution.

Secondly
, due to the indispensability of petroleum products in the modern economy, it would be
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult for us to invest in the new technologies, with higher
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
, which emit less waste material into the atmosphere
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
increasing fuel costs may render it useless in terms of operational cost.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Hence
impact on the environment may increase
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prices
due to shoot up.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
So
if fuel
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
plummet, it will encourage us to find new sustainable alternate solutions.

In conclusion
, I believe that the solution to the climate and shipment crisis does not lie in excluding the large portion of the masses from a thing upon which they
highly
depend,
rather
it lies in the inclusion of all the stakeholders which can be best achieved by decreasing the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
prices
of oil and exploring sustainable solutions to mitigate it.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Write a letter to an airline manager to find out about something you forgot on the plane during your travel. In your letter– give details about your flight– describe the item you forgot– explain why it is important that you get it back v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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